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1. The following essay lacks supporting details at certain key points. Identify the spots where details are needed.Formula for Happiness1Everyone has his or her own formula for happiness. 2As we go through life, we discover the activities that make us feel best. 3Ive already discovered three keys to happiness. 4I depend on karate, music, and self-hypnosis.5Karate helps me feel good physically. 6Before taking karate lessons, I was tired most of the time, my muscles felt like foam rubber, and I was twenty pounds overweight. 7After three months of these lessons, I saw an improvement in my physical condition. 8Also, my endurance has increased. 9At the end of my workday, I used to drag myself home to eat and watch television all night. 10Now, I have enough energy to play with my children, shop, or see a movie. 11Karate has made me feel healthy, strong, and happy.The spot where supporting details are needed occurs after sentence _.12Singing with a chorus has helped me achieve emotional well-being by expressing my feelings. 13In situations where other people would reveal their feelings, I would remain quiet. 14Since joining the chorus, however, I have an outlet for joy, anger, or sadness. 15When I sing, I pour my emotions into the music and dont have to feel shy. 16For this reason, I most enjoy singing certain kinds of music, since they demand real depth of feeling.The first spot where supporting details are needed occurs after sentence _.The second spot occurs after sentence _.17Self-hypnosis gives me peace of mind. 18This is a total relaxation technique, which I learned several years ago. 19Essentially I breathe deeply and concentrate on relaxing all my muscles. 20I then repeat a key suggestion to myself. 21Through self-hypnosis, I have gained control over several bad habits that have long been haunting me. 22I have also learned to reduce the stress that goes along with my secretarial job. 23Now I can handle the bosss demands or unexpected work without feeling tense.The first spot where supporting details are needed occurs after sentence _.The second spot occurs after sentence _.24In short, my physical, emotional, and mental well-being have been greatly increased through karate, music, and self-hypnosis. 25These activities have become important elements in my formula for happiness.2. The following essay contains irrelevant sentences that do not relate to the thesis of the essay or support the topic sentence of the paragraph in which they appear. Cross out the irrelevant sentences and write the numbers of those sentences in the spaces provided.Playing on the Browns1For the past three summers, I have played first base on a softball team known as the Browns. 2We play a long schedule, including playoffs, and everybody takes the games pretty seriously. 3In that respect, were no different from any other of the thousand or so teams in our city. 4But in one respect, we are different. In an all-male league, we have a woman on the team-me. 5Thus Ive had a chance to observe something about human nature by seeing how the men have treated me. 6Some have been disbelieving; some have been patronizing; and, fortunately, some have simply accepted me.7One new team in the league was particularly flabbergasted to see me start the game at first base. 8Nobody on the Comets had commented one way or the other when he saw me warming up, but playing the actual game was another story. 9The Comets first-base coach leaned over to me with a disbelieving grin and said, “You mean, youre starting, and those three guys are on the bench?” 11I nodded and he shrugged, still amazed. 12He probably thought I was the managers wife. 13When I came up to bat, the Comet pitcher smiled and called to his outfielders to move way in on me. 14Now, I dont have a lot of power, but Im not exactly feeble. 15I used to work out on the exercise machines at a local health club until it closed, and now I lift weights at home a couple of times a week.16 I wiped the smirks off their faces with a line drive double over the left fielders head.The number of the irrelevant sentence: _17The next game, we played another new team, the Argyles, and their attitude was patronizing. 18The Argyles had seen me take batting practice, so they didnt do anything so rash as to draw their outfield way in. 19They had respect fro my ability as a player. 20However, they tried to annoy me with phony concern. 21For example, a redheaded Argyle got on base in the first inning and said to me, “Youd better be careful, Hon. 22When you have your foot on the bag, somebody might step on it. 23You can get hurt in this game.” 24I was mad, but I have worked out several mental techniques to control my anger because it interferes with my playing ability. 25Well, this delicate little girl survived the season without injury, which is more than I can say for some of the “he-men” on the Argyles.The number of the irrelevant sentence: _26Happily, most of the teams in the league have accepted me, just as the Browns did. 27The men on the Browns coached and criticized me (and occasionally cursed me) just like anyone else. 28Because Im a religious person, I dont approve of cursing, but I dont say anything about it to my teammates. 29They are not amazed when I get a hit or stretch for a wide throw. 30My average this year was higher than the averages of several of my teammates, yet none of them acted resentful or threatened. 31On several occasions I was taken out late in a game for a pinch runner, but other slow players on the team were also lifted at times for pinch runners. 32Every woman should have a team like the Browns!The number of the irrelevant sentence: _33Because I really had problems only with the new teams, Ive concluded that its when people are faced with an unfamiliar situation that they react defensively. 34Once a rival team has gotten used to seeing me on the field, Im no big deal. 35Still, I suspect that the Browns secretly feel were a little special. 36After all, we won the championship with a woman on the team.3. The following essays could be revised to improve their coherence. Answer the questions about coherence that come after each essay.Noise Pollution1Natural sounds-waves, wind, birdsong-are so soothing that companies sell recordings of them to anxious people seeking a relaxing atmosphere at home or in the car. 2One reason why “environmental sounds” are big business is the fact that ordinary citizens, especially city dwellers, are bombarded by noise pollution. 3On the way to work, on the job, and on the way home, the typical urban resident must cope with a continuing barrage of unpleasant sounds.4The noise level in an office can be unbearable. 5Form nine to five oclock, phones and fax machines ring, computer keyboards chatter, intercoms buzz, and copy machines thump back and forth. 6Every time the receptionists cant find people, they resort to a nerve-shattering public address system. 7And because the managers worry about the employees morale, they graciously provide the endless droning of canned music. 8This effectively eliminates any possibility of a moment of blessed silence. 9Travelling home from work provides no relief from the noisiness of the office. 10The ordinary sounds of blaring taxi horns and rumbling buses are occasionally punctuated by the ear-piercing screech of car brakes. 11Taking a shortcut through the park will bring the weary worker face to face with chanting religious cults, freelance musicians, screaming children, and barking dogs. 12None of these sounds can compare with the large radios many park visitors carry. 13Each radio blasts out something different, from heavy-metal rock to baseball, at decibel levels so strong that they make eardrums throb in pain. 14If there are birds singing or wind in the trees, the harried commuter will never hear them.15Even a trip to work at 6 or 7 A.M. isnt quiet. 16No matter which route a worker takes, there is bound to be a noisy construction site somewhere along the way. 17Hard hats will shout from third-story windows to warn their coworkers below before heaving debris out and sending it crashing to earth. 18Huge front-end loaders will crunch into these piles of rubble and back up, their warning signals letting out loud, jarring beeps. 19Air hammers begin an earsplitting chorus of rat-a-tat-tat sounds guaranteed to shatter sanity as well as concrete. 20Before reaching the office, the worker is already completely frazzled.21Noise pollution is as dangerous as any other kind of pollution. 22The endless pressure of noise probably triggers countless nervous breakdowns, vicious arguments, and bouts of depression. 23And imagine the world problems we could solve, if only the noise stopped long enough to let us think. 1. In “Noise Pollution,” what is the number of the sentence to which the transition word Also could be added in para. 2?_2. In the last sentence of para. 2 to what does the pronoun This refer?_3. What is the number of the sentence to which the transition word But could be added in para. 3?_4. What is the number of the sentence to which the transition word Then would be added in para. 4?_5. What is the number of the sentence to which the transition word Meanwhile could be added in para. 4?_6. What word is used as a synonym for debris in para. 4?_Weight loss1The big fraternity party turned out to be the low point of my first year at college. 2I was in heaven until I discovered that my date with handsome Greg, the fraternity vice president, was a hoax: He had used me to win the “ugliest date” contest. 3I ran sobbing back to the dorm, wanting to resign from the human race. 4Then I realized that it was time to stop kidding myself about my weight. 5Within the next two years, I lost forty-two pounds and turned my life around. 6Losing weight gave me self-confidence socially, emotionally, and professionally.7I am more outgoing socially. 8Just being able to abandon dark colors, baggy sweaters, and tent dresses in favor of bright colors, T-shirts, and designer jeans made me fell better in social situations. 9I am able to do more things. 10I once turned down an invitation for a great camping trip with my best friends family, making up excuses about sun poisoning and allergies. 11Really, I was too embarrassed to tell them that I couldnt fit into the bathroom in their Winnebago! 12I made up for it last summer when I was one of the organizers of a college backpacking trip through the Rockies. 13Most important, losing weight helped me seek new professional goals. 14When I was obese, I organized my whole life around my weight, as if it were a defect I could do nothing about. 15With my good grades, I could have chosen almost any major the college offered, but I had limited my goal to teaching kindergarten because I felt that little children wouldnt judge how I looked. 16Once I was no longer fat, I realized that I love working with all sorts of people. 17I became a campus guide and even had small parts in college theater productions. 18As a result, last year I changed my major to public relations. 19The area fascinates me, and I now have good job prospects there.20I have also become more emotionally honest. 21Rose, at the college counseling center, helped me see that my “fat and jolly” personality had been false. 22I was afraid others would reject me if I didnt always go along with their suggestions. 23I eventually put Roses advice to the test. 24My roommates were planning an evening at a Greek restaurant. 25I loved the restaurants atmosphere, but there wasnt much I like on the menu