高中英語(yǔ)學(xué)生寫作常見錯(cuò)誤分析課件.ppt

,興國(guó)縣第三中學(xué) 邱冬華,英語(yǔ)寫作常見錯(cuò)誤分析,高考作文主要弱點(diǎn): 1.中國(guó)式英語(yǔ)多; 2. 語(yǔ)法概念模糊,語(yǔ)用失誤多; 3. 拼寫錯(cuò)誤多; 4. 詞匯量少,詞匯概念不清; 5.句子不完整及累贅； 6. 審題馬虎,敘述不著點(diǎn)子;,教師心目中的好文章: 1.書寫工整漂亮。 2有內(nèi)容,涉及基本要點(diǎn); 3. 句子沒毛病,無(wú)語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤或語(yǔ)用失誤; 4. 句法上,簡(jiǎn)單句與復(fù)合句或復(fù)雜句相間; 5. 連貫性好; 6. 詞匯檔次較高; 7. 表達(dá)功能或意念時(shí),用語(yǔ)得體,有骨頭,且有血有肉.,一、從高考閱卷看孩子練英語(yǔ)書法的重要性,書寫分，（15）評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中明確規(guī)定，書寫差，以致影響交際要將分?jǐn)?shù)降一個(gè)檔次，一個(gè)檔次為5分。 英語(yǔ)書法,過好英語(yǔ)書寫關(guān)這個(gè)話題.可能有人認(rèn)為我這個(gè)高中老師談這個(gè)問題也太小兒科了.且慢,待我說了一個(gè)實(shí)際情況你再作結(jié)論.,英語(yǔ)書寫的規(guī)范整潔漂亮,應(yīng)該是一個(gè)老話題.但自從2007年我們地區(qū)的市級(jí)考試實(shí)施網(wǎng)上閱卷以來(lái),其重要性顯得尤為明顯.所謂的網(wǎng)上閱卷.就是把學(xué)生的試卷掃描以后,進(jìn)入電腦.以互聯(lián)網(wǎng)的形式,讓閱卷老師在電腦上打分,于統(tǒng)計(jì)工作帶來(lái)很大的便利.一份字跡清楚飽滿漂亮的試卷,其在電腦顯示屏上看上去是很清晰的.閱卷老師閱卷時(shí)看了覺得心情舒暢.分?jǐn)?shù)稍微給高點(diǎn)是在情理之中的事.但一份書寫差勁的試卷就糊了.所以.在我們江蘇省英語(yǔ)高考的新的試卷評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中對(duì)書面表達(dá)的細(xì)則規(guī)定:書寫模糊不清可降一個(gè)等級(jí)計(jì)分.一個(gè)等級(jí)就是5分.這種無(wú)須多少智力因素去左右的分?jǐn)?shù),失了豈不可惜.,一份字跡模糊的試卷,即使考生的實(shí)際水平很高,很有可能要吃虧的.即使容許你查分,到時(shí)也是啞巴吃黃連有苦說不出的.何況仲裁老師又不是你親娘舅.是親娘舅可能要申請(qǐng)回避的哦.,二、簡(jiǎn)單單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤,2、our school is very beatiful.,3 The house is being buit now.,1、Our monter is very hard- working, and he is always the frist to come to our classroom and the last to leave.,monitor,first,beautiful,built,4 、I am very glad to recive your letter.,5 、Last Thusday , we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing.,6、 Thank you for your litter asking about the rebuilt primary school.,receive,Thursday,letter,二、中國(guó)式英語(yǔ)多。如：,例1如翻譯這句“我們學(xué)校將要建造一個(gè)植物花園，學(xué)校將種植不同種類的樹木和花草。很多學(xué)生將這句翻譯為” Our school wants to improve our environment and our school will build a botanical garden 。,提示：當(dāng)句子主語(yǔ)不好表達(dá)時(shí)用被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)或者靈活變換主語(yǔ)，如上句改為We will plant different kinds of trees ,flowers and grass in and around our school ,A botanical garden will be built for us to visit and practice in .,例2Today, Money to everybody is very importance, ours eat, cloth, live, go etc. 改為： Today, money to everybody is very important. Including our eating, wearing, living, going etc.,1.不一致所謂不一致不光指主謂不一致，它還包括了數(shù)的不一致， 時(shí)態(tài)不一致及代詞不一致等 例、When one have money , he can do what he want to .,三語(yǔ)法概念模糊,語(yǔ)用失誤多具體表現(xiàn)為不一致及“綜合性語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤”，諸如時(shí)態(tài)，語(yǔ)態(tài)，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)，大小寫等方面的錯(cuò)誤。,(人一旦有了錢，他就能想干什么就干什么),剖析：one是單數(shù)第三人稱，因而本句的have應(yīng)改為has ;同理，want應(yīng)改為wants.本句是典型的主謂不一致 改為： Once one has money ,he can do what he wants (to do),例2. 1.To do well in college, good grades are essential. 剖析：句中不定式短語(yǔ) “to do well in college” 的邏輯主語(yǔ)不清楚 改為：To do well in college, a student needs good grades .2 .Be ill ,she had to look after her sick mother at home. (使用非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞時(shí)，非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的邏輯主語(yǔ)和句子主語(yǔ)要保持一致)。,例3They started working at once, clean the windows and sweeping the floor. （并列詞要保持一致） 例4，They said it is such a beautiful day that they would remember it forever. （主從句的時(shí)態(tài)要保持一致） 例5，After graduate from high school,he went to work in a small company.,cleaning,was,graduating,2、語(yǔ)法概念模糊,1、There is no need worried about it. 改為： There is no need to worry about it 2、We may think that our parents are not believe in us. 改為We may think that our parents do not believe in us. 3、We should try to spend more time to talk with them. 改為,We should try to spend more time talking with them.,4 Everything was done,they sat in the yard chatting with the elderly people. 改為： Everything done,they sat in the yard chatting with the elderly people 5 The old womam has three sons ,all of them are doctors.(句法錯(cuò)誤) 改為： The old womam has three sons ,all of whom are doctors。,三.句子不完整（Sentence Fragments）,例 There are many ways to know the society. For example by TV ,radio ,newspaper and so on .,剖析：本句后半部分“for example by TV ,radio, newspaper and so on .”不是一個(gè)完整的句子，僅為一些不連貫的詞語(yǔ)，不能獨(dú)立成句,改為：There are many ways to know society ,for example ,by TV ,radio ,and newspaper.,2.考生在嘗試寫一些從句和復(fù)雜的 句子結(jié)構(gòu)。但往往忘記了寫主句從而導(dǎo)致句子的不完整 1).Hang Kang which has many beautiful places of interest and is famous for its theme park. 改為： .Hang Kang which has many beautiful places of interest is famous for its theme park. 2)It is known to us all,so we must seize the time and cherish our life.（改法較多） 3 )Jane Austin who was born and brought up in a village She wrote many famous novels 。 改為： Jane Austin who was born and brought up in a village wrote many famous novels 。,例2，We believe you will success in passing the driving examination.,四.詞性誤用(Misuse of Parts of Speech),“詞性誤用”常表現(xiàn)為：介詞當(dāng)動(dòng)詞用；形容詞當(dāng)副詞用；名詞當(dāng)動(dòng)詞用等,例例 None can negative the importance of money.,剖析：negative 系形容詞，誤作動(dòng)詞。,改為：None can deny the importance of money.,改為： We believe you will succeed in passing the driving examination.,例3，Id like to wish her a happily birthday to express my thanks to you for your hard working. 改為; Id like to wish her a happy birthday to express my thanks to you for your hard work. 例4, We all think its our duty to protection and beautiful our environment. 改為;We all think its our duty to protect and beautify our environment.,本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同位語(yǔ)從句，我們按照上述“能用詞組的不用從句”可以改為：In spite of his laziness, I like him.,五.累贅(Redundancy),言以簡(jiǎn)潔為貴。寫句子沒有一個(gè)多余的詞；寫段落沒有一個(gè)無(wú)必要的句子。能用單詞的不用詞組；能用詞組的不用從句或句子。如：,例1In spite of the fact that he is lazy, I like him.,例2 For the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.,剖析：整個(gè)句子可以大大簡(jiǎn)化。改為： Diligent, caring people use money only to buy what they need.,例3 My name is Li Hua and I am a student who study in Xing Hua Middle School.,改為: My name is Li Hua and I am a student of Xing Hua Middle School.,找錯(cuò)誤,Welcome to the column:”English Writing”! In order that improve your English writing skills and learning well, we expext all of you to post your articles on the column.You can write anything that you are famliar to and send them to us .Afterwards, teachers can give you some advices on what you written online.In this way,Im sure you can make more progresses.The students whose writing are excellent will be awarding. The first prize: an MP4,f