2025年上海市高考英語熱點(diǎn)復(fù)習(xí)：概要寫作之記敘文

專題19概要寫作之記敘文

目錄

題型綜述2

解題攻略3

高考練場(chǎng)6

變式演練11

01題型綜述

(-)題型解讀

1.題型特點(diǎn)

材料類型：通常為一篇完整的記敘文,內(nèi)容涉及人物，事件，時(shí)間，地點(diǎn)和情感等要素。

寫作要求：要求考生根據(jù)原文內(nèi)容,用簡(jiǎn)潔的語言概括文章的主要內(nèi)容，通常要求在60詞左右。

評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)：主要考察考生對(duì)文章內(nèi)容的理解,信息提取和語言表達(dá)能力。要點(diǎn)完整，語言簡(jiǎn)潔，語法正確是關(guān)鍵。

2.常見主題

人物故事：描述某個(gè)人物的經(jīng)歷，成長(zhǎng)或轉(zhuǎn)變。

事件經(jīng)過：敘述某個(gè)事件的發(fā)生，發(fā)展和結(jié)果。

情感體驗(yàn)：展現(xiàn)人物在特定情境下的情感變化。

寓意啟示：通過故事傳達(dá)某種道理或啟示。

（二）寫作步驟與技巧

1.通讀全文，把握主旨

快速瀏覽：先快速瀏覽文章，了解大致內(nèi)容和結(jié)構(gòu)。

標(biāo)記關(guān)鍵信息：在閱讀過程中，標(biāo)記出人物，時(shí)間，地點(diǎn)，主要事件和情感變化等關(guān)鍵信息。

2.提煉要點(diǎn)，去次留精

提取關(guān)鍵要素：根據(jù)文章內(nèi)容，提煉出人物，事件，情感和結(jié)果等核心要點(diǎn)。

忽略細(xì)節(jié)：避免過多涉及文章中的具體細(xì)節(jié),如對(duì)話，描述性語言等。

3.組織語言，簡(jiǎn)潔表達(dá)

使用簡(jiǎn)單句：盡量使用簡(jiǎn)單句和短句，避免復(fù)雜句式。

合理轉(zhuǎn)換表達(dá)：可以用同義詞或短語替換原文中的關(guān)鍵詞，但要保持原意。

注意連貫性：使用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞（如“211＜1”？戰(zhàn)“廿611”等）使內(nèi)容連貫。

4.檢查核對(duì)，確保準(zhǔn)確

核對(duì)要點(diǎn)：檢查是否遺漏了關(guān)鍵信息。

語法檢查：確保句子結(jié)構(gòu)正確，時(shí)態(tài)一致。

字?jǐn)?shù)控制：嚴(yán)格控制在60詞左右。

（三）模板及句型

L通用模板示例

開頭：Thestorymainlytellsabout…（點(diǎn)明故事主要圍繞什么展開,填入主要人物及大致主題）

主體內(nèi)容：Firstly,（描述故事開頭的關(guān)鍵事件及人物行為）.Then,（接著闡述事件的發(fā)展情況）.Afterthat,（繼續(xù)說

明后續(xù)重要情節(jié),比如遇到的問題或轉(zhuǎn)折等）.

結(jié)尾：Finally,（總結(jié)故事的結(jié)局，如人物最終的情況，問題的解決結(jié)果等）.

2.常用句型

＞描述人物行為：

Themaincharacterdecidedto...（主要人物決定做...）

He/Shetriedhardto...（他/她努力去...）

＞體現(xiàn)事件發(fā)展順序：

Atthebeginningofthestory,...（在故事開始時(shí)...）

Asthestorywenton,…（隨著故事的發(fā)展...）

A表達(dá)結(jié)果或結(jié)局：

Intheend,he/shemanagedto...（最后，他/她成功地...）

Eventually,theproblemwassolvedand...（最終，問題被解決了并且...）

A轉(zhuǎn)折與對(duì)比：

However,thingsdidn'tgoasexpected.（然而，事情并沒有如預(yù)期那樣發(fā)展。）

Unlikewhathe/shethoughtbefore,...（不像他/她之前所想的那樣...）

總之，上海高考英語記敘文概要寫作需要考生仔細(xì)分析文本，遵循合理的步驟和運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)?shù)募记桑湫?，?zhǔn)確概括出文章的

核心內(nèi)容，達(dá)到概要寫作的要求。

02解題攻略

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圖口目困

記敘文體的閱讀材料，相比其他文體而言，寫概要相對(duì)容易。在寫概要前，除明確文章主題外，還應(yīng)抓

住六個(gè)要素：when,where,who,what,why,how0在這六個(gè)要素中，所占內(nèi)容比重最大的是what。一般來

說，記敘文的故事概要可以用這樣的模板來表示：

記敘文：what/who/when/where/why/how

Whodidwhatby...because...

當(dāng)然,不是說每個(gè)故事概要都包含how或why,有時(shí)兩者選其一即可。

典例剖析

(2025屆上海市普陀區(qū)高三上學(xué)期一?？荚囉⒄Z試卷)

Directions:Readthefollowingpassage.Summarizethemainideaandthemainpoint(s)ofthepassageinnomorethan60words.

Useyourownwordsasfaraspossible.

ThePriceofWinning

Fourteen-year-oIdAngussitsonthebench,watchinghisbaseballteamplay.He'soutofthegamebecausehemadea

mistake.Forhiscoach,that*sunacceptable-mistakesdon'twingames.Butformostteens,thefocusonwinningisn'tas

important.Inarecentstudy,90%ofteenagerssaidtheywouldratherplayandlosethansitonthesidelinesandnotplayatall.

Forthem,sportsareaboutfun,learning,andbeingpartofateam.However,formanycoachesandparents,winningis

everything,andtheyexpectperfectionfromyoungplayers.

Unfortunately,thispressuretowindrivesmanykidsawayfromorganizedsportsearlyon.Incompetitiveevents,nearly

everyactionaplayermakesisexamined.Parentsandcoachesconstantlyshoutinstructions,sometimesyellingatkidsforerrors

ormissedshots.Thisintenseenvironmentdoesn'tletkidsmaketheirownchoicesorlearnfromtheirmistakes.Insteadof

enjoyingthegame,youngplayersfeelwatchedandjudgedeverysecond.Theylosethefreedomtoexploretheirabilitiesand

developnaturallyasathletesandindividuals.

Theemphasisonwinningcreatesdeeperissues,too.Manykidsfeelanxiousbecausethey5reonlypraisedforscoring

goalsorwinningraces,notfortryinghardorimproving.Overtime,thisfocusonresultscanharmtheirself-confidence,

especiallyifthey'reoftenbenched.Theystarttobelievethey'reonlyvaluableiftheyperformperfectly,whichcanmakesports

feellikeaburdeninsteadofajoy.

Twomonthslater,Angusisbackplayingbaseball——butnotonateam.He'sattheparkwithfriends,playingjustforfun,

andhe'smuchhappier.Thisraisesanimportantquestion:Howmanypotentialchampionswillquitsportsunlessadultschange

theirattitude?Foryoungathletestothrive,theyneedsupportandencouragement,notthepressuretoalwayswin.

【導(dǎo)語】本文是一篇夾敘夾議文。文章通過講述棒球選手安格斯因?yàn)楸贿^度要求獲勝，而產(chǎn)生巨大的心理壓力，因此導(dǎo)致

球場(chǎng)失誤，被罰下場(chǎng)的故事，講述了盲目追求獲勝的弊端：過早離開有組織的體育運(yùn)動(dòng)，引起自身焦慮。強(qiáng)調(diào)運(yùn)動(dòng)過程中,

運(yùn)動(dòng)員需要更多的支持和鼓勵(lì),才能避免焦慮，提升自信,進(jìn)而自由地探索自己的能力，更加享受運(yùn)動(dòng)帶來的樂趣，激發(fā)出自

己的潛力。

解題步驟

第一步:讀懂原文,明確篇章結(jié)構(gòu)

本文的篇章結(jié)構(gòu)為“總一分一總”式：

第1段：介紹背景,年輕人對(duì)輸贏的看法與教練和家長(zhǎng)的看法不同。

第2段：分析過度強(qiáng)調(diào)勝利對(duì)孩子的負(fù)面影響。

第3段：指出這種壓力對(duì)孩子的心理影響。

第4段：總結(jié)問題，并提出對(duì)孩子真正有益的支持方式。

第二步：去次留精,提煉關(guān)鍵信息

段落關(guān)鍵詞

1.背景?Angus,mistake,coach,winning,teens,fun,team

2.負(fù)面影響?pressure,drivesaway,examined,shout,errors,judged

3.心理影響?anxiety,praised,self-confidence,burden

4.總結(jié)?quit,attitude,support,encouragement

第三步：歸納要點(diǎn),合理轉(zhuǎn)換表達(dá)

第1段：Angussitsonthebenchbecausehemadeamistake.Teensfocusonfun,butcoachesandparentsfocusonwinning.

（安格斯因失誤被罰坐板凳。青少年注重樂趣，而教練和家長(zhǎng)注重勝利。）、

第2段：Pressuretowindriveskidsaway.Coachesandparentsconstantlyshoutinstructionsandcriticizeerrors.

（對(duì)勝利的壓力使孩子們遠(yuǎn)離運(yùn)動(dòng)。教練和家長(zhǎng)不斷喊叫指令并批評(píng)錯(cuò)誤。）

第3段：Kidsfeelanxiousandloseconfidencebecausethey'reonlypraisedforresults.Sportsbecomeaburden.

（孩子們因只被表揚(yáng)結(jié)果而感到焦慮，失去信心，運(yùn)動(dòng)變成負(fù)擔(dān)。）

第4段：Manykidsquitsports.Youngathletesneedsupportandencouragement,notjustpressuretowin.

（許多孩子放棄運(yùn)動(dòng)。年輕運(yùn)動(dòng)員需要支持和鼓勵(lì)，而不僅僅是勝利的壓力。）

第四步二句內(nèi)多樣掛意過渡銜接

使用“However”連接青少年和教練/家長(zhǎng)的不同觀點(diǎn)。

使用“Insteadof，和“Ratherthan”表達(dá)對(duì)比。

使用“Because”和"so”連接因果關(guān)系。

概要寫作答案（60詞左右）

Angussitsonthebenchbecausehemadeamistake.Teensfocusonfun,butcoachesandparentsfocusonwinning.

Pressuretowindriveskidsaway.Coachesandparentsconstantlyshoutinstructionsandcriticizeerrors.Kidsfeelanxiousand

loseconfidencebecausethey'reonlypraisedforresults.Sportsbecomeaburden.Manykidsquitsports.Youngathletesneed

supportandencouragement,notjustpressuretowin.

Incompetitiveevents,youngplayersarealwaysexpectedperfectionbytheircoachesandparents,whichhasanegative

impactonteenagers.Notonlydoesitcausethatteenagersprefertositonthesidelinesinsteadoftakingapositiveintheevents,

butalsothefocusonresultscanalsomakethemfeelfrustrated.Ifadultschangetheirattitude,youngathleteswillbuildup

confidenceandinspirepotential.

03高考練場(chǎng)

（-）

【來源】2023年上海交大附中嘉定分校高三英語階段練習(xí)卷

Directions:Readthefollowingpassage.Summarizethemainideaandthemainpoint（s）ofthepassageinnomorethan60

words.Useyourownwordsasfaraspossible.

Afterthesuddenlossofherfive-year-olddaughter,Elizabeth,NataliaSpencerfeltsheneededtodosomethingtohonor

thelittlegirl.ThatstrongwishinspiredSpencertostartwhatshecallsa"WalkofLove”,a6,000-miletrek（長(zhǎng)途旅行）alongthe

Britishcoastline.

""Elizabethparticularlylovedthebeachandtheseaandwevisitedtheseasidealot.Aftershepassedaway,Iwenttothe

seasideanditwasthefirsttimethatIhadfeltsomecomfort,Spencersaid.66IknewthiswaswhatIhadtodo.Itwassomething

Icoulddoanditwouldmakelifemorebearable.9,

OnValentine'sDay,SpencerbeganwalkingDurdleDoorinDorset,England,thelastbeachshetookElizabethtobefore

shebecameill.Sofar,Spencerhasjourneyedabout1,500miles,walkingthroughDorset,Cornwall,Devonandtheentirecoast

ofWales.Everyday,exceptSaturday,Spencerwalks20miles.Oftenlocalsjoinher;manytimestheysharestoriesaboutlosing

theirownchildren.

EverythingchangedforSpenceronNov.22,2015.SpencernoticedElizabethwasillwithwhatshethoughtwasachest

infection.Butthegirl'shealthworsenedrapidly.Doctorsdiagnosedherwithalife-threateningimmuneconditionwherethe

immunecellsdamagethetissuesandorgans.ThiscausedElizabeth'sorganstoshutdownandstoppedthebloodsupplytoher

armsandlegs.ShewasmovedtoBristolChildren'sHospitalwhereshespent18daysonlifesupportbeforepassingawayon

Dec.10.

AfterElizabethdied,Spencerstruggled.InJanuary,afriendencouragedSpencertogoforawalkandthetwoendedupat

theGowerPeninsulainWales.WhilewalkingprovidesSpencerwithtimetogrieve（悲傷），she'salsousingthetriptoraise

￡100,000fortheBristolChildren'sHospital.

Spencerexpectstocompleteherwalknextspring.She'dlovetofinishonValentine'sDay,butdoesn'tknowifthatis

realistic.

（二）

【2023年上海市青浦區(qū)高三上學(xué)期期末英語試卷】

In2012,1setmyselfthechallengeoftryingtoreadabookfromeverycountryofall195UN-recognizedstatesinayear.

Withnoideahowtofindpublications,Idecidedtoasktheplanefsreadersforhelp.IcreatedablogcalledAYearofReading

theWorldandputoutanappealforsuggestionsoftitlesthatIcouldreadinEnglish.

Theresponsewasamazing.BeforeIknewit,peopleallovertheplanetweregettingintouchwithideasandoffersofhelp.

Somepostedmebooks.Othersdidhoursofresearchonmybehalf.Inaddition,severalwriters,likeTurkmenistan'sAk

WelsaparandPanama'sJuanDavidMorgan,sentmeunpublishedtranslationsoftheirnovels.Evenwithsuchanextraordinary

teambehindme,however,sourcingbookswasnoeasytask.

Buttheeffortwasworthit.AsImademywaythroughtheplanefsliterarylandscapes,extraordinarythingsstartedto

happen.Farfromsimplyarmchairtravelling,IfoundIwasinhabitingthementalspaceofthestorytellers.Idiscovered,book

packingofferedsomethingthataphysicaltravellercouldhopetoexperienceonlyrarely:ittookmeinsidethethoughtsof

individualslivingfarawayandshowedmetheworldthroughtheireyes.Morepowerfulthanathousandnewsreports,these

storiesnotonlyopenedmymindtobasicinformationoflifeinotherplaces,butopenedmyhearttothewaypeopletheremight

feel.Andthatinturnchangedmythinking.Throughreadingthestoriessharedwithmebybookishstrangersaroundtheglobe,I

realizedIwasnotanisolatedperson,butpartofanetworkthatstretchedallovertheplanet.

Onebyone,thecountrynamesonthelistthathadbegunasanintellectualexercisetransformedintoplacesfilledwith

laughter,love,anger,hopeandfear.Landsthathadonceseemedforeignandremotebecamecloseandfamiliartome-places

Icouldidentifywith.Atitsbest,Ilearned,fictionmakestheworldreal.

變式演練

A

[2023屆上海市上海中學(xué)下學(xué)期高考英語階段模擬試卷】

ThePaperArchitect

Foralongtime,ZahaHadidwasknownas"thepaperarchitect,someonewhosegranddesignsneverleftthepageto

becomerealbuildings.Butinrecentyearsherbuildingshavesprunguplikemushroomsallovertheworld:theGuangzhouOpera

HouseinChina,acarfactoryinGermany,acontemporaryartmuseuminRome,atransportationmuseuminScotland,andthe

AquaticsCenterforthe2012OlympicsinLondon.

Pinningdownherindividualstyleisdifficult.CertainlyHadidhasbeeninfluencedbythemodemtrendinarchitecturethat

likestoplaywiththetraditionalshapeofbuildingsandfragment(分解)them,creatingunpredictableanglesandsurfaces.

Workinginthisway,sheandherfellowarchitectshaveproducedsomespaceship-likestructuresthatseemtogoagainstthe

normallawsofengineering.

TheideaofofferingtheviewermultipleperspectivesfromwithinthebuildingisathemethatrunsthroughHadid'swork.

Hermostfamousbuilding,MAXXI-amuseumforthe21stcentury-inRome,isagreatexample.Itisacomplexand

spectacularstructureofinterlockingconcreteshapes.InsidespacesinterconnectTikewindingstreets,sothatthevisitoris

surprisedandcharmedateachturn.TheRosenthalCenterinCincinnatiproducesasimilareffect.Likeanextensionofthestreetit

sitson,itdrawsyouin,withwalkwaysdirectingyouthiswayandthat,andwindowsinvitingyoutosampletheview."It'sabout

promenading^^saysHadid,"beingabletopause,tolookout,lookabove,looksideways.^^

SowhatinspiressomeonelikeHadidtoproducesuchdifferentbuildings?Shespeaksincomplimentarytermsaboutthe

workofhercontemporaries.Shealsocitesthenaturallandscapeandorganicgeologicalpatternsasaninfluence.Butitisnota

questionthatsheseemstooconcernedwithandnorperhapsshouldwebe.Hadidisanartist,sharingwithushervisionofwhat

buildingsshouldbelikeandalways,asshedoesso,tryingtokeephumaninterests-ourinterestsasusersandviewers——atheart.

【2024屆上海市奉賢區(qū)格致中學(xué)高考英語階段模擬試卷】

OnSunday,theseconddayofSpringFestival,amanwaskilledafterhefellintothetigerenclosurewhiletryingtoget

intothezooinNingbo,EastChina'sZhejiangProvince,withoutpayingforaticket.

Thetragedycosttwolives,asthetigerwasshotdeadwhenzooemployeestriedtorescuetheman.

Asnewsoftheincidentspread,themajorityofvoicesonlineblamedthedeadmanfbrtheanimal'sdeath.Somesaidthis

wasasignthatpeoplearebecomingmorecoldhearted.Buttheyarewrong.Peoplehavebeendisplayingincreasinglymore

enthusiasmforhelpingthoseinneedandparticipatingincharitywork.In2016,theChinaCharityFederationreceived

donationsof18.8billionyuan($2.7billion)intotal,46percentmorethanthedonationsreceivedin2015,andtheysenthelping

handstoonetragedyafteranother.

Peoplearejusttiredofforgivingthoseinthewrong.Whilesympathyisright,ithasbeenabusedtoomuch.When

somebodycommitsacrime,nomatterhowcruelthecrimeis,mediaoutletsexplainthecriminal'smiserablechildhoodand

therearecallsforforgiveness.Whensomeonesmokesinpublic,therearealwayspeoplecallingfortolerance.

Peoplearefedupandangrywithlawbreakersescapingtheirduepunishmentsinthenameofforgivenessandtolerance.

ButgoingbacktothetragedyatthewildlifeparkinNingbo,thetiger9sdeathshowstheparkwasnotwellpreparedfbr

suchemergencies.Theydidnothaveanytranquilizergunsthatcouldsedatethetigerimmediatelyandsavethelivesofboththe

manandtheendangeredanimal.

Inthemeantime,itisnecessarytoraisepeople'sawarenessthattheanimalsinzoosandwildlifeparksarenot

domesticatedpets,andoftheneedforvisitorstoobserverulesfortheirownsafety.

ThemanintheNingboincidentpaidforhisfaultwithhislife,butthetigerwaskilledforhisfault,too.Wesincerely

hopenomoretigersorhumanswillpayforsuchfault.

專題19概要寫作之記敘文

目錄

題型綜述2

解題攻略3

高考練場(chǎng)6

變式演練11

401?題型綜述

（一）題型解讀

i.題型特點(diǎn)

材料類型：通常為一篇完整的記敘文,內(nèi)容涉及人物，事件，時(shí)間，地點(diǎn)和情感等要素。

寫作要求：要求考生根據(jù)原文內(nèi)容,用簡(jiǎn)潔的語言概括文章的主要內(nèi)容，通常要求在60詞左右。

評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)：主要考察考生對(duì)文章內(nèi)容的理解,信息提取和語言表達(dá)能力。要點(diǎn)完整，語言簡(jiǎn)潔，語法正確是關(guān)鍵。

2.常見主題

人物故事：描述某個(gè)人物的經(jīng)歷，成長(zhǎng)或轉(zhuǎn)變。

事件經(jīng)過：敘述某個(gè)事件的發(fā)生，發(fā)展和結(jié)果。

情感體驗(yàn)：展現(xiàn)人物在特定情境下的情感變化。

寓意啟示：通過故事傳達(dá)某種道理或啟示。

（二）寫作步驟與技巧

1.通讀全文，把握主旨

快速瀏覽：先快速瀏覽文章，了解大致內(nèi)容和結(jié)構(gòu)。

標(biāo)記關(guān)鍵信息：在閱讀過程中，標(biāo)記出人物，時(shí)間，地點(diǎn)，主要事件和情感變化等關(guān)鍵信息。

2.提煉要點(diǎn)，去次留精

提取關(guān)鍵要素：根據(jù)文章內(nèi)容，提煉出人物，事件，情感和結(jié)果等核心要點(diǎn)。

忽略細(xì)節(jié)：避免過多涉及文章中的具體細(xì)節(jié),如對(duì)話，描述性語言等。

3.組織語言，簡(jiǎn)潔表達(dá)

使用簡(jiǎn)單句：盡量使用簡(jiǎn)單句和短句，避免復(fù)雜句式。

合理轉(zhuǎn)換表達(dá)：可以用同義詞或短語替換原文中的關(guān)鍵詞，但要保持原意。

注意連貫性：使用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞（如“211＜1”？戰(zhàn)“廿611”等）使內(nèi)容連貫。

4.檢查核對(duì)，確保準(zhǔn)確

核對(duì)要點(diǎn)：檢查是否遺漏了關(guān)鍵信息。

語法檢查：確保句子結(jié)構(gòu)正確，時(shí)態(tài)一致。

字?jǐn)?shù)控制：嚴(yán)格控制在60詞左右。

（三）模板及句型

L通用模板示例

開頭：Thestorymainlytellsabout…（點(diǎn)明故事主要圍繞什么展開,填入主要人物及大致主題）

主體內(nèi)容：Firstly,（描述故事開頭的關(guān)鍵事件及人物行為）.Then,（接著闡述事件的發(fā)展情況）.Afterthat,（繼續(xù)說

明后續(xù)重要情節(jié),比如遇到的問題或轉(zhuǎn)折等）.

結(jié)尾：Finally,（總結(jié)故事的結(jié)局，如人物最終的情況，問題的解決結(jié)果等）.

2.常用句型

＞描述人物行為：

Themaincharacterdecidedto...（主要人物決定做...）

He/Shetriedhardto...（他/她努力去...）

＞體現(xiàn)事件發(fā)展順序：

Atthebeginningofthestory,...（在故事開始時(shí)...）

Asthestorywenton,…（隨著故事的發(fā)展...）

A表達(dá)結(jié)果或結(jié)局：

Intheend,he/shemanagedto...（最后，他/她成功地...）

Eventually,theproblemwassolvedand...（最終，問題被解決了并且...）

A轉(zhuǎn)折與對(duì)比：

However,thingsdidn'tgoasexpected.（然而，事情并沒有如預(yù)期那樣發(fā)展。）

Unlikewhathe/shethoughtbefore,...（不像他/她之前所想的那樣...）

總之，上海高考英語記敘文概要寫作需要考生仔細(xì)分析文本，遵循合理的步驟和運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)?shù)募记?，句型，?zhǔn)確概括出文章的

核心內(nèi)容，達(dá)到概要寫作的要求。

02解題攻略

提史秘籍

記敘文體的閱讀材料，相比其他文體而言，寫概要相對(duì)容易。在寫概要前，除明確文章主題外，還應(yīng)抓

住六個(gè)要素：when,where,who,what,why,howo在這六個(gè)要素中，所占內(nèi)容比重最大的是what。一般來

說，記敘文的故事概要可以用這樣的模板來表示：

記敘文：what/who/when/where/why/how

Whodidwhatby...because...

當(dāng)然,不是說每個(gè)故事概要都包含how或why,有時(shí)兩者選其一即可。

典例剖析

(2025屆上海市普陀區(qū)高三上學(xué)期一?？荚囉⒄Z試卷)

Directions:Readthefollowingpassage.Summarizethemainideaandthemainpoint(s)ofthepassageinnomorethan60words.

Useyourownwordsasfaraspossible.

ThePriceofWinning

Fourteen-year-oldAngussitsonthebench,watchinghisbaseballteamplay.He'soutofthegamebecausehemadea

mistake.Forhiscoach,that*sunacceptable-mistakesdon'twingames.Butformostteens,thefocusonwinningisn'tas

important.Inarecentstudy,90%ofteenagerssaidtheywouldratherplayandlosethansitonthesidelinesandnotplayatall.

Forthem,sportsareaboutfun,learning,andbeingpartofateam.However,formanycoachesandparents,winningis

everything,andtheyexpectperfectionfromyoungplayers.

Unfortunately,thispressuretowindrivesmanykidsawayfromorganizedsportsearlyon.Incompetitiveevents,nearly

everyactionaplayermakesisexamined.Parentsandcoachesconstantlyshoutinstructions,sometimesyellingatkidsforerrors

ormissedshots.Thisintenseenvironmentdoesn'tletkidsmaketheirownchoicesorlearnfromtheirmistakes.Insteadof

enjoyingthegame,youngplayersfeelwatchedandjudgedeverysecond.Theylosethefreedomtoexploretheirabilitiesand

developnaturallyasathletesandindividuals.

Theemphasisonwinningcreatesdeeperissues,too.Manykidsfeelanxiousbecausethey'reonlypraisedforscoring

goalsorwinningraces,notfortryinghardorimproving.Overtime,thisfocusonresultscanharmtheirself-confidence,

especiallyifthey5reoftenbenched.Theystarttobelievethey'reonlyvaluableiftheyperformperfectly,whichcanmakesports

feellikeaburdeninsteadofajoy.

Twomonthslater,Angusisbackplayingbaseball-butnotonateam.He'sattheparkwithfriends,playingjustforfun,

andhe'smuchhappier.Thisraisesanimportantquestion:Howmanypotentialchampionswillquitsportsunlessadultschange

theirattitude?Foryoungathletestothrive,theyneedsupportandencouragement,notthepressuretoalwayswin.

【導(dǎo)語】本文是一篇夾敘夾議文。文章通過講述棒球選手安格斯因?yàn)楸贿^度要求獲勝，而產(chǎn)生巨大的心理壓力，因此導(dǎo)致

球場(chǎng)失誤，被罰下場(chǎng)的故事，講述了盲目追求獲勝的弊端：過早離開有組織的體育運(yùn)動(dòng)，引起自身焦慮。強(qiáng)調(diào)運(yùn)動(dòng)過程中,

運(yùn)動(dòng)員需要更多的支持和鼓勵(lì)，才能避免焦慮，提升自信，進(jìn)而自由地探索自己的能力，更加享受運(yùn)動(dòng)帶來的樂趣，激發(fā)出自

己的潛力。

解題步驟

第一步:讀懂原文,明確篇章結(jié)構(gòu)

本文的篇章結(jié)構(gòu)為“總一分一總”式：

第1段：介紹背景,年輕人對(duì)輸贏的看法與教練和家長(zhǎng)的看法不同。

第2段：分析過度強(qiáng)調(diào)勝利對(duì)孩子的負(fù)面影響。

第3段：指出這種壓力對(duì)孩子的心理影響。

第4段：總結(jié)問題，并提出對(duì)孩子真正有益的支持方式。

第二步：去次留精,提煉關(guān)鍵信息

段落關(guān)鍵詞

1.背景?Angus,mistake,coach,winning,teens,fun,team

2.負(fù)面影響?pressure,drivesaway,examined,shout,errors,judged

3.心理影響?anxiety,praised,self-confidence,burden

4.總結(jié)?quit,attitude,support,encouragement

第三步：歸納要點(diǎn),合理轉(zhuǎn)換表達(dá)

第1段：Angussitsonthebenchbecausehemadeamistake.Teensfocusonfun,butcoachesandparentsfocusonwinning.

（安格斯因失誤被罰坐板凳。青少年注重樂趣，而教練和家長(zhǎng)注重勝利。）、

第2段：Pressuretowindriveskidsaway.Coachesandparentsconstantlyshoutinstructionsandcriticizeerrors.

（對(duì)勝利的壓力使孩子們遠(yuǎn)離運(yùn)動(dòng)。教練和家長(zhǎng)不斷喊叫指令并批評(píng)錯(cuò)誤。）

第3段：Kidsfeelanxiousandloseconfidencebecausethey'reonlypraisedforresults.Sportsbecomeaburden.

（孩子們因只被表揚(yáng)結(jié)果而感到焦慮，失去信心，運(yùn)動(dòng)變成負(fù)擔(dān)。）

第4段：Manykidsquitsports.Youngathletesneedsupportandencouragement,notjustpressuretowin.

（許多孩子放棄運(yùn)動(dòng)。年輕運(yùn)動(dòng)員需要支持和鼓勵(lì)，而不僅僅是勝利的壓力。）

第四步二句內(nèi)多樣掛意過渡銜接

使用“However”連接青少年和教練/家長(zhǎng)的不同觀點(diǎn)。

使用“Insteadof，和“Ratherthan”表達(dá)對(duì)比。

使用“Because”和"so”連接因果關(guān)系。

概要寫作答案（60詞左右）

Angussitsonthebenchbecausehemadeamistake.Teensfocusonfun,butcoachesandparentsfocusonwinning.

Pressuretowindriveskidsaway.Coachesandparentsconstantlyshoutinstructionsandcriticizeerrors.Kidsfeelanxiousand

loseconfidencebecausethey'reonlypraisedforresults.Sportsbecomeaburden.Manykidsquitsports.Youngathletesneed

supportandencouragement,notjustpressuretowin.

Incompetitiveevents,youngplayersarealwaysexpectedperfectionbytheircoachesandparents,whichhasanegative

impactonteenagers.Notonlydoesitcausethatteenagersprefertositonthesidelinesinsteadoftakingapositiveintheevents,

butalsothefocusonresultscanalsomakethemfeelfrustrated.Ifadultschangetheirattitude,youngathleteswillbuildup

confidenceandinspirepotential.

03高考練場(chǎng)

（-）

【來源】2023年上海交大附中嘉定分校高三英語階段練習(xí)卷

Directions:Readthefollowingpassage.Summarizethemainideaandthemainpoint（s）ofthepassageinnomorethan60

words.Useyourownwordsasfaraspossible.

Afterthesuddenlossofherfive-year-olddaughter,Elizabeth,NataliaSpencerfeltsheneededtodosomethingtohonor

thelittlegirl.ThatstrongwishinspiredSpencertostartwhatshecallsa"WalkofLove”,a6,000-miletrek（長(zhǎng)途旅行）alongthe

Britishcoastline.

""Elizabethparticularlylovedthebeachandtheseaandwevisitedtheseasidealot.Aftershepassedaway,Iwenttothe

seasideanditwasthefirsttimethatIhadfeltsomecomfort,Spencersaid.66IknewthiswaswhatIhadtodo.Itwassomething

Icoulddoanditwouldmakelifemorebearable.9,

OnValentine'sDay,SpencerbeganwalkingDurdleDoorinDorset,England,thelastbeachshetookElizabethtobefore

shebecameill.Sofar,Spencerhasjourneyedabout1,500miles,walkingthroughDorset,Cornwall,Devonandtheentirecoast

ofWales.Everyday,exceptSaturday,Spencerwalks20miles.Oftenlocalsjoinher;manytimestheysharestoriesaboutlosing

theirownchildren.

EverythingchangedforSpenceronNov.22,2015.SpencernoticedElizabethwasillwithwhatshethoughtwasachest

infection.Butthegirl'shealthworsenedrapidly.Doctorsdiagnosedherwithalife-threateningimmuneconditionwherethe

immunecellsdamagethetissuesandorgans.ThiscausedElizabeth'sorganstoshutdownandstoppedthebloodsupplytoher

armsandlegs.ShewasmovedtoBristolChildren'sHospitalwhereshespent18daysonlifesupportbeforepassingawayon

Dec.10.

AfterElizabethdied,Spencerstruggled.InJanuary,afriendencouragedSpencertogoforawalkandthetwoendedupat

theGowerPeninsulainWales.WhilewalkingprovidesSpencerwithtimetogrieve（悲傷），she'salsousingthetriptoraise

￡100,000fortheBristolChildren'sHospital.

Spencerexpectstocompleteherwalknextspring.She'dlovetofinishonValentine'sDay,butdoesn'tknowifthatis

realistic.

【導(dǎo)語】本文是一篇記敘文。文章介紹一個(gè)叫NataliaSpencer的人為了紀(jì)念自己死去的女兒參加了一個(gè)步行項(xiàng)目，緩解

自己生活的同時(shí)，也為兒童醫(yī)院籌錢，這次步行給她提供了與當(dāng)?shù)厝朔窒黻P(guān)于失去小孩的故事的機(jī)會(huì)。（文章大意）

解題步驟

第一步：讀懂原文,明確篇章結(jié)構(gòu)

本文的篇章結(jié)構(gòu)為“總一分一總”式：

第1段：介紹NataliaSpencer因失去女兒Elizabeth而決定進(jìn)行“愛的行走

第2段：描述Spencer選擇海邊行走的原因。

第3段：介紹行走的起點(diǎn)和目前的進(jìn)展。

第4段：講述Elizabeth的病情和去世過程。

第5段：描述Spencer在行走過程中得到的支持以及她的目標(biāo)。

第6段：總結(jié)Spencer的計(jì)劃和期望。

第二步：去次留精,提煉關(guān)鍵信息

段落關(guān)鍵詞

1.挑戰(zhàn)設(shè)定?2012,challenge,195countries,blog,AYearofReadingtheWorld

2.讀者回應(yīng)?response,ideas,help,books,unpublishedtranslations

3.尋找書籍的困難③sourcingbooks,difficult

4.閱讀體驗(yàn)?extraordinarythings,mentalspace,emotions,changedthinking

5.總結(jié)感悟?countries,familiar,fiction,real

第三步：歸納要點(diǎn),合理轉(zhuǎn)換表達(dá)

第1段：NataliaSpencerstarteda6,000-mile"WalkofLove^^tohonorherdaughterElizabeth.

（NataliaSpencer為紀(jì)念女兒Elizabeth開始了6000英里的“愛的行走”。）

第2段：Elizabethlovedthebeach,andwalkingbytheseabroughtSpencercomfort.

（Elizabeth喜歡海灘，海邊行走讓Spencer感到安慰。）

第3段：SpencerbeganherwalkonValentine^Dayandhastraveled1,500milessofar.Localsoftenjoinher.

（Spencer在情人節(jié)開始行走，目前已走了1500英里，當(dāng)?shù)厝顺＜尤胨?。?/p>

第4段：Elizabethfellillin2015andpassedawayafter18daysonlifesupport.

（Elizabeth在2015年生病，經(jīng)過18天的生命支持后去世。）

第5段：Spencerusesthewalktogrieveandraise￡100,000forBristolChildren'sHospital.

（Spencer通過行走哀悼并為布里斯托兒童醫(yī)院籌集10萬英鎊。）

第6段：Sheplanstofinishthewalknextspring,possiblyonValentine'sDay.

（她計(jì)劃明年春天完成行走，可能在情人節(jié)。）

第四步：句式多樣,注意過渡銜接

使用“After”連接背景和原因。

使用“While”表達(dá)行走的雙重目的。

使用“and”連接目標(biāo)和計(jì)劃。

概要寫作答案（60詞左右）

AfterlosingherdaughterElizabeth,NataliaSpencerbegana6,000-mile“WalkofLove^^alongtheBritishcoastline.Elizabeth

lovedthebeach,andwalkingbytheseabroughtSpencercomfort.SpencerstartedonValentine'sDayandhaswalked1,500

milessofar.Sheusesthewalktogrieveandraise￡100,000forBristolChildren'sHospital.Sheplanstofinishnextspring,

possiblyonValentine'sDay.

Tohonorherdaughterwhorecentlydied,NataliaSpencerstartedthe6,000-mileWalkofLovealongtheBritishcoastline,

whichshewishestofinishnextspring.Shedidthistomakelifemorebearableandtoraise￡100,000fortheBristolChildren's

Hospital.TheWalkprovidedherchancestosharewiththelocalsstoriesaboutlosingchildren,（wordcount58）

（二）

【2023年上海市青浦區(qū)高三上學(xué)期期末英語試卷】

In2012,1setmyselfthechallengeoftryingtoreadabookfromeverycountryofall195UN-recognizedstatesinayear.

Withnoideahowtofindpublications,Idecidedtoasktheplanefsreadersfbrhelp.IcreatedablogcalledAYearofReading

theWorldandputoutanappealforsuggestionsoftitlesthatIcouldreadinEnglish.

Theresponsewasamazing.BeforeIknewit,peopleallovertheplanetweregettingintouchwithideasandoffersofhelp.

Somepostedmebooks.Othersdidhoursofresearchonmybehalf.Inaddition,severalwriters,HkeTurkmenistan'sAk

WelsaparandPanama'sJuanDavidMorgan,sentmeunpublishedtranslationsoftheirnovels.Evenwithsuchanextraordinary

teambehindme,however,sourcingbookswasnoeasytask.

Buttheeffortwasworthit.AsImademywaythroughtheplanefsliterarylandscapes,extraordinarythingsstar