讀后續(xù)寫入門級課件

讀后續(xù)寫寫作技巧每多得一分，都能往前進一步Whatwouldyoudoifyouscratchedyourneighbor’scarbyaccident?提取故事的主要信息和情節(jié)人物性格分析和續(xù)寫情節(jié)設(shè)計修飾潤色，豐富情節(jié)01020304目錄Contents練習(xí)和作業(yè)01提取故事的主要信息和情節(jié)基本步驟和技巧01基本步驟快速閱讀文章，找出文章中的六要素（5W1H)——who,when,where,what,why,how。對故事情節(jié)進行整理和分析，劃出表示人物情感態(tài)度的詞，方便后續(xù)的設(shè)計和預(yù)判。技巧1.人名、地名都是大寫。2.注意一些表示時間或遞進關(guān)系的詞，如thenextday/twodaysago、however/finally等，預(yù)示著一個情節(jié)的發(fā)生或者故事的轉(zhuǎn)折。3.每段的主要故事情節(jié)通常在首句或尾句。

WhenthelastcustomerleftKFC,itwasalready10:30pm.Adam,an18-year-oldcollegestudent,draggedhimselfhome.HehadbeenworkingatKFCforoveramonththatsummervacation.

Enteringhisroom,AdamfoundhisyoungerbrotherBillsittingontheedgeofhisbedwithanuneasyexpressiononhisface.

“Sorry,Adam.I..Ididsomethingwrong,”Billjumpedupandsaidnervously.

“Whatisit?”

“Thisafternoon

Isneaked(溜)outforarideonyourmotorcycleandaccidentallyhitourneighborOsmanBrook'scar.IwassoscaredandI..Ihurriedhomeinpanic.

”

“Isthecarseriouslydamaged?”

“Theleftheadlightgotbroken.”

“It'strulyyourfaultandit'sreallydangeroustorideamotorcycleatyourage.Besides,it'sillegal,"Adamraisedhisvoice,obviouslyannoyed.Hearingthis,Billloweredhisheadandbithislipshard.

“Anyway,

it'snousecryingoverspiltmilk.Iwilldealwithittomorrow.Nowyougotobedandhaveagoodsleep.”whenwhatwhyhow

ThenextmorningwhenAdamgotup,Billwasstillsleepingsoundly.Adamwasmoredeterminedaboutwhatheoughttodoasanelderbrother.

Afterbreakfast,

Adamtookoutallthemoneyhehadearned

andwentoutofthehousewithit.Intheyardhesawhismotorcycle,onwhosesidethescratches(劃痕)wereclearlyvisible.Adamshookhisheadandsighedslightly.Then

hequickenedhispacetoOsman'shouse.

Whenhearrived,hewaswelcomedbyOsman'swifeMary,whotoldhimthatOsmanhadgonetothegaragetohavehiscarrepaired.

“Ihavesomethingimportanttotellhim.CanIwaituntilhecomesback?”Adamrequestedeagerly.

“Ofcourse.Heshouldbehomesoon,”MaryinvitedAdamin,servedhimacupofcoffeeandbeganchattingwithhim.

Afterhalfanhour,thedooropenedandcame

inOsman.Havingsaidhellotoeachother,OsmanandAdambothsatdownonthesofa.How：Adamdecidedtopayforhisbrother’sfault,sohewenttoOsman’shousetodealwithit.02人物的性格分析和續(xù)寫情節(jié)設(shè)計人物性格的分析0101

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OsmanAfterhalfanhour,thedooropenedandincameOsman.Havingsaidhellotoeachother,OsmanandAdambothsatdownonthesofa.polite,kindandfriendly續(xù)寫情節(jié)設(shè)計02Adamclearedhisthroatandbegantospeak.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Justthen,therecameaknockatthedoor._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________1.AdamsaidsorrytoOsman.2.Adamdecidedtopayfortherepaircharge.3.Osmanrefusedit.-------------------------------------------------------------------------------1.OsmanopenedthedoorandfounditwasBill.2.BillsaidsorrytoOsman,andthesetwobrothersinsistedtopayfortherepaircharge.Osmanrefusedagain.3.ThetwobrothersdecidedtohelpOsmandosomeworkinstead.分析續(xù)寫段落之間的關(guān)系sorryandnervoussurprisedmovedhappy03修飾潤色，豐富情節(jié)主要技巧1.增加情感描寫：描述人物的情感2.細化動作描寫：①把動作分解成動作鏈；

②增加修飾動作的描寫（怎么樣的動）3.增加對話4.必要時可以適當(dāng)回憶1.增加情感描寫情感描寫主要是用來描述人物的情感主要句式：主語+felt/was/were+(程度副詞）+表示情緒的形容詞（sad，happy...)如：Billfeltverysorry.練習(xí)：翻譯1.Osman感到非常的感動。Osmanwasvery/deeplymoved.2.這兩兄弟非常的驚訝和開心。Thetwobrotherswereverysurprisedandhappy.①把動作分解為動作鏈。如：apology→AadambowedlowandsaidsorrytoOsman。練習(xí)：擴句和翻譯1.亞當(dāng)賠錢。動作分解：把錢從口袋中拿出來→遞給Osman→說：“這是我所有的錢了，希望能夠賠償你的損失?！狈g：Adamtookoutthemoneyfromhispocketandthengavehimthemoney,said：“Thisisallmymoney,Ihopeitcanpayforyourloss.”2.Osman開門發(fā)現(xiàn)是Bill。動作分解：走過去→打開門→發(fā)現(xiàn)是Bill站在門外→感到驚訝→請進來Osmanwenttoopenthedoor,onlytofindthatBillwasstandingoutside.Hefeltverysurprisedandlethimin.2.細化動作描寫:②增加修飾動作的描寫（怎么樣的動），如增加副詞。如：said→sincerelysaid

萬能句式：主語+副詞+單個動詞/主語+動詞短語+副詞

練習(xí)：翻譯和擴句1.Osman擺了擺手（怎么擺的手），拒絕拿這個錢。（增加副詞）

Osmanwavedhishandgentlely,andrefusedtotakethemoney.3.增加對話注意事項！禁止廢話連篇.避免對故事情節(jié)和人物刻畫沒有幫助的對話。不可過于強調(diào)對話的方式。比如每個said都加一個副詞，適當(dāng)?shù)牧舭卓梢越o讀者想象的空間。如果想要增加詞匯量，可用動作描寫來替代。如：“Comein”,Osmansmiled.對話對象十分明確的情況下，無需頻繁添加用來引出對話的單詞。如在Billl來Osman家之前，房間里只有Adam和Osman,完全沒必要一直用Adam/Osmansaid來引出對話。同上，可加入一些動作描寫使語言更生動自然。對話不可過多，不能超過非對話的一半。4.必要時可以適當(dāng)增加一些情節(jié)回顧比如在續(xù)寫Adam上門道歉這一情節(jié)中，Adam要承認(rèn)自己弟弟犯下的錯誤，那么就需要對弟弟所做的事情做一個簡單的回顧。所以，情節(jié)回顧是需要的時候才回顧，并且要盡量簡短，如果對故事情節(jié)和人物塑造沒有幫助，就不要進行回顧。主要技巧1.增加情感描寫：描述人物的情緒2.細化動作描寫：①把動作分解成動作鏈；

②增加修飾動作的描寫（怎么樣的動）3.增加對話4.必要時可以適當(dāng)增加一些情節(jié)回顧1.AdamsaidsorrytoOsman.2.Adamdecidedtopayfortherepaircharge.3.Osmanrefusedit.Adamclearedhisthroatandbegantospeak.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________練習(xí)主要技巧1.增加情感描寫2.細化動作描寫3.增加對話4.必要時可以適當(dāng)增加一些情節(jié)回顧Adamclearedhisthroatandbegantospeak.

“Mr.Brook,I’mheretomakeanapology.YesterdayafternoonmybrotherBilldamagedyourcarandranawayinpanic.Weareawfullysorryforthat.”“Oh,Isee.Butit’snobigdeal,”O(jiān)smansmiled.ThenAdamdrewoutthemoney

fromhispocketandsaidtoOsman

withsincerity,“ThisisallthemoneyIhave.Iwonderifitcanpayforyourloss.”However,Osmaninsistedthatitwasonlyminordamageand

refusededtotakeit.Justthen,therecameaknockatthedoor._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Let’shaveatry!1.增加情感描寫2.細化動作描寫3.增加對話4.必要時可以適當(dāng)增加一些情節(jié)回顧1.OsmanopenedthedoorandfounditwasBill.2.BillsaidsorrytoOsman,andthesetwobrothersinsistedtopayfortherepaircharge.Osmanre