2022年新高考I卷讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)David's run公開(kāi)課課件-高三英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)

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重生我是編劇madebykitty上一世，你只是一個(gè)酷愛(ài)追劇的小孩；看得正高興的時(shí)候，什么！編劇居然把你最愛(ài)的角色寫(xiě)死了！什么！編劇居然把你最磕的cp拆散了！一氣之下，一口氣沒(méi)過(guò)來(lái)，還好重生一世，你變成了一個(gè)編劇；這一次你要奪回你的一切......假如你是一個(gè)編劇，那么，讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)對(duì)你來(lái)說(shuō)，等同于丟給你一個(gè)沒(méi)寫(xiě)完的劇本，讓你創(chuàng)作Afterthisclass,youwillbeableto:1.Readandunderstandthestory;2.Analyseanddesigntheplot;3.Writeandpolishyourstory.LearningObjectives:LeadinReadforthebasicinformationWhen:thedayofthebig

.Where:

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ofDavid’sschool.David---aten-year-oldboywitha

.What:Davidwantedto_________takingpartintherace.Why:Davidworriedthatotherstudentswould

him.cross-countryruntheracespotspecialeducationteacherbraindiseaselaughatgiveupAlthoughDavidhada___________(who),hehadn'tmissasinglepracticeandtriedhisbestinordertotakepartinthebigcross-countryrun.However,on_______________________________________(when),Ifoundhimstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafenceandnotwarminguplikeothercompetitors.SoIwalkedovertoaskhimforthereason.Davidtoldmehewantedto__________participatingintherace(what)becausehewasafraidof________________(why).Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.Retellthestorybraindiseasethebigdayofthebigcross-counbtryrungiveupbeinglaughedatAndthenwhatwillhappen?ThinkforthethemeWillDavidovercomethefearofbeinglaughedat?YesorNO#3:Continuationwritingalwayspasspositivemessage.Writingprinciples:negative-positiveproblem-solutionThinkforthethemeWhichthemehasnothingtodowiththisstory?B.Self-confidenceC.FriendshipA.Perseverance(毅力）DesigntheplotPara.1Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Para.2IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Davidfinallychangedhismindanddecidedtoparticipateintherace.兩段首句定一框逆推法Seeinghisfacefilledwithanxietyandhesitation,IdecidedtotalksomethingwithhimDesigntheplotPara.2IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Davidfinallymadeittothefinishingline.Nothingisimpossibletoadeterminedheart.Justtryandignoreothers.Thematchbeganwithabangfromthestarter’sgun.兩框兩首正能量apositiveending+主題升華句DesigntheplotPara.1Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Thelastsentence:Davidfinallychangedhismindanddecidedtoparticipateintherace.（銜接句）Sentence1:Seeinghisfacefilledwithanxietyandhesitation,Idecidedtotalksomethingwithhim.Q1:WhatwouldIsayanddotoDavidinordertopersuadehimtoparticipate?

Q2:Afterhearingmywords,howdidDavidfeel?moredetails語(yǔ)言描寫(xiě)＋動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)語(yǔ)言描寫(xiě)+情緒描寫(xiě)+動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)神態(tài)描寫(xiě)細(xì)節(jié)添加法DesigntheplotPara.2IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Thelastsentence:Davidfinallymadeittothefinishingline.Nothingisimpossibletoadeterminedheart.Justtryandignoreothers.Sentence1:Thematchbeganwithabangfromthestarter’sgun.moredetailsQ1:SeeingDavid’sdeterminationtomakeittothefinishingline,whatdidthepeoplewatchingdotohim?Q2:What’stheresultoftherun?WhatdidhismatesandIdotocelebratehisdetermination?動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)+情感描寫(xiě)環(huán)境描寫(xiě)GroupdiscussionsGroup1&2designtheplotofpara.1.Group3&4designtheplotofpara.2.Onepossibleversion:Para1:Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.1.看到他臉上充滿了焦慮和猶豫，我決定和他談?wù)?。我輕輕地拍了拍他的肩膀，問(wèn)他為什么不跑。2.猶豫了一會(huì)兒，他輕聲說(shuō)“我的腦部疾病使我不能像其他孩子一樣跑步，我害怕其他學(xué)校的學(xué)生會(huì)嘲笑我”3.我看著他，柔聲鼓勵(lì)道：“我知道你為這次比賽付出了很多努力，我多么佩服你的努力，為什么不試一下呢？”4.他陷入沉思并沉默了一會(huì)兒。然后他抬起頭，臉上又露出了慣常的咧嘴大笑。5.他看著我，慢慢地點(diǎn)了點(diǎn)頭，臉上露出了堅(jiān)定。最終他改變主意，決定參加比賽。Para2:IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.6.他站在其他孩子中間，雖然個(gè)子小，但那種堅(jiān)定不移的神情與他們無(wú)異。7.隨著發(fā)令槍響，孩子們?nèi)缂銢_出去，而大衛(wèi)卻以他自己的步伐緩緩前行。8.他似乎并不在意自己落在后面，只是專注于每一步，目光緊盯著前方。9.看著他那充滿勇氣的身影，觀眾席上的加油聲越來(lái)越響亮，鼓勵(lì)著他繼續(xù)前行。10.最終，當(dāng)他堅(jiān)持不懈地越過(guò)終點(diǎn)線時(shí)，全場(chǎng)爆發(fā)出雷鳴般的掌聲。正是他堅(jiān)強(qiáng)的決心和毅力使他克服了挑戰(zhàn)，完成了這場(chǎng)比賽。Clues&details1.Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent.2.Healwaysparticiptedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.3.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepracticeandalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren.4.Davidcouldrunifhewanted.5.Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim.6.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren.7.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.可轉(zhuǎn)換人稱用在第一段，我說(shuō)服、鼓勵(lì)David去參加比賽?？赊D(zhuǎn)換人稱，用在第一段，表明David為什么不想?yún)⒓颖荣惖脑颉＿m當(dāng)改變，David決定參加比賽時(shí)可用這個(gè)。Clues&details1.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.2.Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.3.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.4.IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.適當(dāng)改變，比賽結(jié)束時(shí)，受到在場(chǎng)人的鼓勵(lì)時(shí)，David很可能有這個(gè)表情。可以用來(lái)描述David賽跑時(shí)的樣子----動(dòng)作描述可以用來(lái)描述David在比賽時(shí)的結(jié)果：他不可能跑贏別人，但仍堅(jiān)持跑完全程?？捎脕?lái)升華文章主旨Wesatdowntogetheronsomesteps,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Seeinghisfacefilledwithanxietyandhesitation,Idecidedtotalksomethingwithhim.(神態(tài)描寫(xiě)）Itappedhimgentlyontheshoulderandaskedwhyhedecidednottorun.(動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)）Havinghesitatedforamoment,herepliedinalowvoice,“Youknow,________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________”.(我的腦部疾病使我不能像其他孩子一樣跑步，我害怕其他學(xué)校的學(xué)生會(huì)嘲笑我）Ilookedhimstraightintheeye,saying“David,youhaveworkedsohardforthisevent.Thereisnoneedtoworryaboutsomeonelaughingatyou.Ifyoureallywant,justrun!”（動(dòng)作＋語(yǔ)言）Davidwaslostinthoughtandkeptsilentforquiteamoment.______________________________________________________________.(然后他抬起頭，臉上又露出了慣常的咧嘴大笑）(動(dòng)作+神態(tài)）Finally,hechangedhismindanddecidedtoparticipateintherace.（銜接句）

知識(shí)遷移--仿寫(xiě)mybraindiseasepreventsmerunninglikeotherchildrenandIamafraidthatstudentsfromotherschoolswouldlaughatme.Thenheraisedhisheadwithhisusualbigtoothysmilebackonhisface.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartingline.Thematchbeganwithabangfromthestarter’sgun.WhileDavidcouldn’trunlikeotherstudents,__________________________________________________（他拖著他的小身體向前走，左右搖晃著）(動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)）Ibeganshoutingwordsofencouragement.Classmatesallappearedontheracingtrack,cheeringforhim.“Comeon!Youcanmakeit!Weareproudofyou!”theyshoutedenthusiastically.（動(dòng)作＋語(yǔ)言）Whenhefinallyreachedthefinishingline,allthepeoplepresentapplaudedforhim.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________(正是大衛(wèi)堅(jiān)強(qiáng)的決心和強(qiáng)大的毅力使他克服了挑戰(zhàn)，完成了越野賽跑）（主題升華句）hedraggedhissmallbodyforward,rockingfromsidetoside.perseverancethatmadehimovercomethechallengeandfinishedthecross-countryrun.ItwasDavid’sstrongdeterminationandWesatdowntogetheronsomesteps,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Seeinghisfacefilledwithanxietyandhesitation,Idecidedtotalksomethingwithhim.(神態(tài)描寫(xiě)）Itappedhimgentlyontheshoulderandaskedwhyhedecidednottorun.(動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)）Havinghesitatedforamoment,herepliedinalowvoice,“Youknow,mybraindiseasepreventsmerunninglikeotherchildrenandIamafraidthatstudentsfromotherschoolswouldlaughatme”.(）Ilookedhimstraightintheeye,saying“David,youhaveworkedsohardforthisevent.Thereisnoneedtoworryaboutsomeonelaughingatyou.Ifyoureallywant,justrun!”（動(dòng)作＋語(yǔ)言）Davidwaslostinthoughtandkeptsilentforquiteamoment.Thenheraisedhisheadwithhisusualbigtoothysmilebackonhisface.Finally,hechangedhismindanddecidedtoparticipateintherace.

知識(shí)遷移--仿寫(xiě)

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartingline.Thematchbeganwithabangfromthestarter’sgun.WhileDavidcouldn’trunlikeotherstudents,hedraggedhissmallbodyforward,rockingfromsidetoside.Ibeganshoutingwordsofencouragement.Classmatesallappearedontheracingtrack,cheeringforhim.“Comeon!Youcanmakeit!Weareproudofyou!”theyshoutedenthusiastically.Whenhefinallyreachedthefinishingline,allthepeoplepresentapplaudedforhim.ItwasDavid’sstrongdeterminationandperseverancethatmadehimovercomethechallengeandfinishedthecross-countryrun.Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn'tlookatme.

Seeinghisfacefilledwithanxietyandhesitation,Idecidedtotalksomethingwithhim.(神態(tài)描寫(xiě)）

TurningtoDavid,Ismiled,“David,Look,whatawonderfulevent!”（語(yǔ)言描寫(xiě)）“Yeah!”Davidsmiledweakly,loweringhishead.（動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)）

Pattingonhisshoulder,Isaidinasoftvoice,“Iknowyouhaveworkedsohardforthisevent.HowIadmireyourstrongdetermination.Whynotgiveitatry?”

（動(dòng)作＋語(yǔ)言）“Iamafraidkidsfromotherschoolswilllaughatme.Ithinkwhatthecoachsaidisright.”m