2023年高考前英語靜悟材料模板 -寫作

第三章寫作

一、應(yīng)用文

活動報道

假定你是李華，上周日你校舉辦了5公里越野賽跑活動。請你為校英文報寫一篇報道，內(nèi)容包括：

1.參加人員；2.跑步路線：從校門口到南山腳下：3.活動反響。

ACross-countryRunningRace

Inordertoenrichourcampuslife,ourschoolorganizeda5kmcross-countryrunningracelastSunday.

Ninetystudentsfromtwentyclassesparticipatedintherace,amongwhomthirtyweregirls.Participants

setoutat9amfromthegateoftheschool,throughtheRenminPark,andfinallyarrivedatthefootofNanshan

Mountain.

Theracewashighlyihoughlofaidwefeltihalnotonlydidiheevenlimproveouvphysicaland

psychologicalquality,butitalsohelpedusbuildapositiveattitudetowardslife.Wedohopethattheschoolwill

carryoutmoresimilaractivitiesinthefuture.

演講稿

你校將舉辦英語演講比賽。請你以Besmartonlinelearners為題寫一篇發(fā)言稿參賽，內(nèi)容包括：

1.分析優(yōu)勢與不足；2.提出學(xué)習(xí)建議。

Besmartonlinelearners

Learningonlinehasbecomeanimportantwaytostudyrecently.However,eachcoinhastwosides.Sois

learningonline.

Ontheonehand,itissurelyconvenientandflexiblefo)ustolearnonline、becauseit'suptoustodecide

whatwelearnandwhereandwhenwestudy.What'smore,wecanlearnthelessonsrepeatedly.Ontheother

handJearningonlinehassomeweaknesses,Ihebiggestofwhichislowefficiencycausedbyalackof

self-discipline.

Sohowcanwebesmartonlinelearners?First,it'snecessarytohaveaquietandcomfortableroom,which

contributestofocusingattention.Second,goodtimemanagementcanimproveourlearningefficiency.More

importantly,weshouldformalearninggrouponlinetomotivateeachother.

Let'smakejointeffortstobesmartonlinelearners!

通知

假如你是李華，是學(xué)校英語協(xié)會的負(fù)責(zé)人。最近，你校準(zhǔn)備邀請英國心理學(xué)專家CurrySmith就學(xué)習(xí)

減壓舉行一個講座，請你用英語出一則通知。要點：

1.講座地點、時間；2.講座專家、內(nèi)容。

Notice

Alectureconcerningrelievingstudypressureisscheduledtobeheldattheschoolauditoriumfrom3:00p.m.

to5:00p.m.thisFriday.

AfamousEnglishpsychologistnamedCurrySmithisgoingtodeliverthelecture,inwhichhewillhelpus

analysethecausesofstudypressure.Additionally,heintendstoofferussomerelaxingandinterestingwaysto

reducepressure.Definitely,everyattendeeiswelcometoaskquestions.

Duringthecourseofthelecture,beingpoliteandactiveisamust.Also,itiscrucialnottolitterormakenoise.

Youareboundtobenefitalotfromit.

建議信

（江蘇省南通市2022-2023年高三一模）假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三學(xué)生李華，你的英國筆友Jim在給你的郵

件中提到他最近沉迷于網(wǎng)絡(luò)游戲，日常生活受到影響，他為此感到苦惱，請給他回復(fù)郵件，內(nèi)容包括：

1）表示理解2）你的建議

DearJim,

Iamsorrylolearnihalyouareaddicledlovideogamesandihalithasaffecledyourlifegrcally.Butyouarenot

alone,asIwasonceinthesamesituationasyousoIcanfeelhowupsetandstressedyoumustbe.Herearesome

suggestions.

First,trytolimitthetimespentonvideogameseveryday,soyoucaohavemoretimetodosomethingmeaningful

andtakeUDgoodhobbies.Anotherstepistofindpurposeinreality,fromenjoyingface-tofaceconversationswithyour

familyandfriendstohavingawalkinthesunshine.Immerseyourselfinthepliasureofrealliferatherthanavirtual

world,andyouwillfeelmorecontentandrefreshed.

Lifeisfulloffunandsurpriseandjustputawayyourcellphoneandgetouttogetit.

Yours

LiHua

推薦信

（浙江省名校新高考研究聯(lián)盟2023屆高三第一次聯(lián)考）假定你是新華中學(xué)李華，你的外籍朋友Michael來

信表示對中國文化很感興趣，正巧這學(xué)期你校要開設(shè)“話說中國節(jié)（FestiveChina）”的線上課程，請你回信向他推

薦此課程。內(nèi)容包括：I.開設(shè)時間；2.課程內(nèi)容；3.報名方式。

DearMichael,

LearningthatyouareanenthusiastforChineseculture,Iamwritingtorecommendanonlinecourseentitled

“FestiveChina"toyou.

TopromotetraditionalChineseculture,ourschoolwillsetuptheonlinecoursesnextterm,whichisscheduledto

takeplaceat2pmeverySaturdayfromSeptember10th.Consistingof10one-hoursessions,eachoftheminvolvesan

introductionofadistinctiveChinesefestival.Youmaylearntheorigins,backgroundsandcustomsofthefestivals.To

signupforthecourse,youneedtovisitourschoolwebsiteandcompletetheentryform.

Idoguaranteethatmyrecommendationwillneverfailtoamazeyou.Bostwishes.

Yours,

LiHua

邀請信

（2020年1月?浙江卷）假定你是李華，你校將舉辦外國學(xué)生中文演講比賽，請給你的英國朋友George

寫封郵件邀請他參加。內(nèi)容包括:1.比賽時間；2.演講話題；3.報名方式。

DearGeorge,

I'mwritingtoinviteyoutojoinusinthe"Chinesespeechcontestforfbreigners^^tobeheldinourschool.

Theactivityisscheduledat8:00a.m.onJanuary20lhinthelecturehall.

Thethemeofthespeechcontestis“differencesbetweeneasternandwesterncustoms",throughwhichthe

foreignsludenlsareboundlogainabetterunderstandingofChinesesplendidtraditionalcultureandstrengthen

theirloveofChina.

Immenselyfascinatedbyitsmysteriouscultureandage-oldhistoiy,youcan,undoubtedlygiveusa

wonderfulandimpressiveperformance.Youareexpectedtosignupforthecontestatwww.

Chinesespeechcontestfbrfbreigners.coin.Iydappreciateitifyoucouldacceptourinvitation.

Yourssincerely,

LiHua

申請信

（2023?江西高三專題練習(xí)）假定你是李華，你校國際部打算舉辦“教外國學(xué)生下中國象棋（Chinesechess）”的

活動，現(xiàn)正在招募志愿者。你有意向成為志愿者，請你用英語寫一封申請信，內(nèi)容包括：

1.寫信目的；2.你的優(yōu)勢；3.期待同意申請。

【參考范文】

DearSir/Madam,

Learningf?omtheschoolnewspaperthattheInternationalDeDartmentwillholdanactivitytitled“Teaching

ForeignStudentstoPlayChineseChess”,withgreatinterest、I'mwritingloappl、lobeavolunteer.

Beinganoutgoingstudent,I'vebeenlookingforwardtomakingfriendswithforeignersandenhancingmysocial

skill.Afteracarefulconsideration,IthinkI'mqualifiedforthejob.Foronething,I'mgoodatspokenEnglish,which

playsanimportantroleinteachingforeignstudentstoplayChinesechess.Foranother,Ihaveagoodcommandof

ChinesechessandIwonthefirstplaceinthecitychesscontest.

Iwouldappreciateitifyoucouldgivemethechance.Lookingforwardtoyourreply.

Yourssincerely,

LiHua

感謝信

（假如你是新華中學(xué)的學(xué)生會主席李華，你校學(xué)生會應(yīng)英國WestminsterSchool邀請，下星期將到該

校進行交流訪問，向該校學(xué)生介紹中國傳統(tǒng)文化。請你給該校聯(lián)系人Mr.Smith寫一封郵件，信的要點如

下：1.感謝對方的邀請；2.詢問活動安排和說明要介紹的傳統(tǒng)文化內(nèi)容；3.祝愿交流活動成功。

DearMr.Smith,

IamLiHua,chairmanoftheStudentUnionofXinHuaHighSchool.Thankvouforinvitingustovisityour

schoolnexlweek,forwhichwedofeelhonored.NowIamwritingformoredetailedinformation.

SinceitwillbeourfirsttriptoBritain,wewouldliketoknowdetailsaboutthearrangementofthevisit.

Couldyoupleasee-mailourscheduletomeatyourconvenience?Besides,intermsofChinesetraditionalculture,

consideringthatthereisgrowinginterestinTangPoems,weplantointroducethisgreatculturaltreasure.For

betterinteraction,fellowstudentsofyourschoolcanpreparesomerelativequestionsbeforehand.

Edappreciateitifyoucouldgiveusanearlyreply.Wishourinteractionactivityagcealsuccess!

Yours,

LiHua

道歉信

（2021?北京卷）假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三學(xué)生李華。你和英國好友Jim原定本周末一起外出，你因故不

能赴約。請你用英文給他寫一封電子郵件，內(nèi)容包括：1.表達(dá)歉意并說明原因；2.提出建議并給出理

由。

DearJim,

I'msorrytoinformyouthatIcan'tgooutwithyouthisweekend.I'veiustbeentoldthatIhavetogoand

visitmysickgrandfatherinthecountryside,whowassuddenlyadmittedtothehospital.Ihopethechangewon't

causeyoutoomuchtrouble.

HowaboutgoingoutnextSaturdaymorning?Ifit'sconvenientforyouJet'smeetattheschoolgateat9:00.

Pleaseletmeknowwhetheritsuitsyoubest.Ishouldbeavailableanytimenextweekend.

Inaddition,nextSaturday,therewillbeaflowershowinBeihaiParkandwecangotoseetheflowers

together.

Iamlookingforwardtoyourearlyreply.

Yours,

LiHua

求助信

（2020?全國卷III）假定你是李華，你和同學(xué)根據(jù)英語課文改編了一個短劇。給外教MissEvans寫封

郵件，請她幫忙指導(dǎo)。郵件內(nèi)容包括：1.劇情簡介；2.指導(dǎo)內(nèi)容；3.商定時間地點。

DearMissEvans,

Howiseverythinggoing!Iamwritinginsinceritytoaskyouafavorregardingaplayweadaptedaccording

tothetextbook.

We'dliketocombineyourculturewithoursbyadaptingtheclassicnovelTheSteamboatforashortEnglish

play.Theplayissetonabigstormaftermidnight,ontheraftdowntherivernavigation,weseeasteamboatthat

isgoingtosink.Wesavedascaredboy.However,theadaptionisquiteachallenge.HavingwrittentheEnglish

script,wedon'twantanythinginappropriatetospoiltheplay.Sowouldyoupleasesparesomelimeloreviewihe

draftscriptattachedtothisemailandmakenecessarychanges?Ifilisconvenient,mayIpayyouavisitalyour

officenextTuesdaytogiveyoumoredetails?

I'dbeveryappreciativeifyouoffertogivesomeprofbssionaladvice.Lookforwardtoyourearlyreply.Best

regards!

Yourstruly,

LiHua

告知信

（2022屆江蘇省蘇錫常鎮(zhèn)四市高三教學(xué)情況調(diào)查英語適應(yīng)卷）假定你是李華，下周你校將舉辦一場科技展，

希望所有學(xué)生積極參與。請你發(fā)郵件告知因病請假的外國交換生Andy,內(nèi)容包括：

1.展會目的、時間和地點；2.展會內(nèi)容；3.表達(dá)期待。

DearAndy,

Howareyoudoingthesedays?Topromotethestudents'interestinscientifictechnology、ourschoolwillholda

scienceandtechnologyexhibitionfrom9a.m.to5p.m.nextSaturdayintheschoolhall.

Tobeginwith,somevideosandpictureswillbeprovided,throughwhichwewilllearnmoreabouthowthescience

andtechnologyaffectpeople.Thencamethehighlightoftheexhibition:alectureabouthowAIisappliedinvarious

areas.Lastbutnotleast,we'Henjoysomescientificinventionsfromstudents.Wecanalsocommunicatewitheach

otheraboutourownthoughts.

I'mconfirmedyouwilllovetheexhibition.Hopeyouwon'tmissthechaece.

Yours,

LiHua

圖表類作文

（2022年全國乙卷）學(xué)校英文報正在開展以LearningEnglishBeyondtheClassroom為題的討論。請使用圖表中的調(diào)查結(jié)果寫

一篇短文投稿，內(nèi)容包括:

1.學(xué)習(xí)活動狀況描述；

2.簡單評論；

3.你的建議。

【參考范文】

LearningEnglishBeyondtheClassroom

Nowadays,withthegrowingpopularityofsmartphonesandcomputers,anincreasingnumberofstudentsare

choosingtolearnEnglishbeyondtheclassroominvariousways.

IlcaneasilybeseenIhal（hepercentageofsludenlswhochooselisteningloEnglishsongsandwatching

Englishmoviesisrespectively65%and50%.However,thosechoosingreadingEnglishbooksandvisiting

Englishlearningwebsitesonlyaccountfor18%and12%.

AsfarasI'mconcerned,itisadisturbingtrend.Forstudents,whatbenefitsmosttotheirstudyisreading

Englishbooks.Becauseoftheirlackofself-discipline,they'remoreeasilyaddictedtochattingonlineorplaying

games.It'surgentforstudentsthemselvestoimprovetheirselOdisciDline、andit'salsourgentforparentsand

teacherstost】e呷hentheguidance.

二、讀后續(xù)寫

自我成長類

1.真題鏈接1

（2022年新高考I卷）

Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthe

smalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute（路線）throughthickevergreenforest.

1lookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewas

smallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn't

withtheotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.

Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!

Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschoofscoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.t4Iwasafraidthat

kidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughatheexplaineduncomfortably.gavehimthechoicetorunornot,

andlethimdecide.^^

Ibitbackmyfrustration（懊惱）.Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.

AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbody

rockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.

Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhis

classmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheywere

doing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam

Itjusttookhimlonger-that'sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrun

longaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,Iwasfamiliarwith

thechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn7lookatme.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.

2.試題解析

2.1整體把握

主題人與自我-生活與學(xué)習(xí)-個人、家庭、社區(qū)及學(xué)校生活

語境

本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者是一名特殊教育教師，在大型越野賽跑那天，發(fā)現(xiàn)患有大腦疾病

的大衛(wèi)獨自站在一旁。作者問其原因，他說準(zhǔn)備放棄比賽。從教練口中得知，因為擔(dān)心同學(xué)們會嘲笑

語篇

大衛(wèi)，所以教練想讓大衛(wèi)自己去決定是否參加賽跑。作者讓大衛(wèi)追尋自己的內(nèi)心，不理會別人的看

話題

法，大衛(wèi)最終參賽，盡管遇到困難，他戰(zhàn)勝了自己，這已經(jīng)無關(guān)名次，而是他的勇敢和堅定讓這一切

成為可能。

when：thedayofthebigcross-countryrunwhere：theracespot(aplacewiththickevergreen

forest)

who：I——aspecialeducationteacherofDavid'sschool

情節(jié)

David---aten-year-oldboywithabraindisease

梳理

what：Onthedayofthebigcross-countryrun,IsawDavidstandingaloneattheracespotandfoundout

thereasonswhyhehesitatedtotakepartintherace.

why:Davidworriedhemightbelaughedbyothers

由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我們挨著坐著，但大衛(wèi)不愿看我一眼”可知，第一段可描寫作者鼓勵大衛(wèi)繼

續(xù)完成比賽，大衛(wèi)經(jīng)過強烈的心理斗爭，最終決定參加比賽。

情節(jié)

走向

由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我看著大衛(wèi)和其他選手一起走到起跑線上”可知，第二段可描寫大衛(wèi)開始參

賽，雖然中途遇到困難，仍然堅持到最后，完成比賽。

2.2例文賞析

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn7lookatme."Whydoyougiveuptherun,David?^^I

whisperedtohim."Iwillbealoserandotherswilllaughatme,“hemurmured,withhisfaceflushing.Ihugged

himtightly,saying,utYouareadeterminedboyandIbelieveyoucanfacethechallengebravely.More

importantly,itisparticipationratherthantheresultthatmatterstoyou."InspiredbywhatIsaid,Davidlookedup

andsaidfirmly,4€Iwillrun.^^Risingandturningaround,heheadedforthestartingline.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Hearingthegunblasting,they

rushedoutlikearrows.However,Davidfellbehindsoondespitegreatefforts.Everytimehewasabouttoquit,I

shoutedcrazily,€tComeon,David!^^Hekeptrunning,sweatyandexhausted.Finally,whenDavidstruggledto

crossthefinishingline,astormofcheersandapplauseeruptedfromthepeoplepresent.Dragginghisheavylegs,

Davidapproachedme.Heembracedmeandsaid,“Thankyou!”Iwasoverwhelmedwithjoyforhiswonderful

performance.

3.素材積累

3.1情緒類素材積累

滿臉通紅：withhisfaceflushing汗流淡背非常疲憊：sweatyandexhausted喜悅：wasoverwhelmedwith

3.2動作類素材積累

各種“說"：whisper;murmur;saidfirmly;shoutedcrazily飛奔：rushoutlikearrows

掙扎著越過終點線：struggletocrossthefinishingline

爆發(fā)了雷鳴般的歡呼聲和掌聲：astormofcheersandapplauseerupted

1.真題鏈接2

（2023廣東一模）

Hectorstoodinthefrontofhisfifth-gradeclassroomasoneofthelasttwocompetitorsintheRoomFive

GeographyBee.Hisopponenthavingmissedthelastquestion,itwasHector'sturn.Ifheansweredhisquestion

correctly,hewouldbetheRoomFivechampion.

“WheredidIputthatsecondsheetofquestions?”Mr.Adlerwhisperedwhilesearchingthroughathickpile

ofpapersonhismessydesk.Mr.Adler,thoughagreatteacher,hadareputationofbeingdisorganizedwithalong

historyofmisplacingthings.4tOhwell,Iapologizefbrthedelay.^^saidMr.Adlerafterwhatseemedlikealong

time."Hector,pleasetellusthecapitalcityofBrazil.^^Hearingthequestion,Hectorsmiled.Then,therewasthe

answer.

Laterthatdayinthecourtyard,manyclassmatescongratulatedHector.Wearingaproudsmile,hegreetedand

thankedthemall.Oh,thesweettasteofvictory.

Asitwasgettinglate,thecourtyardbecamedeserted.ButHectorstilldidn'twanttoleave.ThenhesawMr.

Adlercrossingthecourtyardandholdingahalf-openbagfullofpapers.Ashehurriedpast,anenvelopedropped

outbutMr.Adlerwasunaware,turnedacorneranddisappearedoutofsight.Hectorpickeditup.Ontheenvelope

werethewords“FifthGradeGeographyBeeQuestionsandAnswers"Hectorstaredwide-eyedattheenvelope.

Beforeheevenhadtimetoreflectontheconsequences,heopeneditandreadthequestions.

AssoonasHectorhaddoneit,heknewitwasthewrongchoice.He'dcheatedandwhateverhedidnow,he

couldn'tchangethefact."WhatifMr.AdlerthoughtIstolethismorning'squestionstoo?”Hectorthought."He'd

takeawaymyRoomFivevictoryfbrsure."Littledidheknowthatoneofthebestdaysinhislifewouldbeturned

intotheworstsoquickly.Tornbyhisconscience,Hectorwastotallyatalosswhattodo.

Beforeherealizedit,HectorfoundhimselfstandinginMr.Adler'sroom.

ThenextdaytheentireschoolcametowatchtheFifthGradeGeographyBee.

2.試題解析

2.1整體把握

主題人與自我-生活與學(xué)習(xí)-個人、家庭、社區(qū)及學(xué)校生活

語境

本篇讀后續(xù)寫為記敘文，文章大意為講述了Hector參加地理知識競賽，通過班級初賽后，意

語篇

外拾到一個信封，里面裝著年級決賽的題目及答案，他打開讀了題目后，知道自己做了不誠

話題

實的事情。接著他去到了老師辦公室，他會怎么做呢？

when：thedaybeforethefinalcompetitionwhere：inMr.Adler'sroom

情節(jié)who：Hector&Mr.Adlerwhat：Hectoraccidentallypickedup“FifthGradeGeographyBee

梳理QuestionsandAnswers.

Afterreadingthequestions,heknewitwasthewrongchoice.

通過第一段首句“Befbreherealizedit,HectorfoundhimselfstandinginMr.Adler'sroom.“可預(yù)

情節(jié)測，續(xù)寫思路為：向老師坦誠交代一找到補救辦法。

走向

通過第二段首句"ThenextdaytheentireschoolcametowatchtheFifthGradeGeogr叩hyBee."可

預(yù)測，續(xù)寫思路為：Hector的表現(xiàn)比賽結(jié)果f感悟到誠實的寶貴。

2.2例文賞析

Beforeherealizedit,HectorfoundhimselfstandinginMr.Adler'sroom.aHector!Comeandhelpmelook

f0r???”“This?”HectorstoppedMr.Adlermid-sentence,holdingouttheopenenvelope.Mr.Adler'sbrowswere

smoothedbutthenknittedagain.Beforeheformedquestions,Hectorstartedunbosominghisregrets.Ifhehad

waitedanothermoment,theywouldhavetornhimintopieces.<4CanIstillbeintheBee?”askedHectortimidly.

"Absolutely,myhonestboy,"Mr.Adlerpattedhisshoulder.4tIdon'tbelieveinpunishingpeopleformakingthe

rightdecisionsandcorrectingtheirmistakes.vImmensereliefwashedoverHector.

ThenextdaytheentireschoolcametowatchtheFifthGradeGeographyBee.Havingbeenuplatestudying,

Hectorlookedexhaustedbutextremelyexcited.Sodidalltheothercompetitors.Alltheeyesfixedonthestage,

Hectorfeltbloodrushingontohischeeksandhisheartbeatingfast.Unfortunately,thequestionsMr.Adler

rewroteweresotoughthathewasknockedoutinroundthree.ButHectorrealizedtohissurprisethathedidn't

feelbadaboutlosingatall.Whetherothersknewhewassmartwasofnosignificance.He'dsetouttolearn

everythingabouttheworldandendeduplearningmoreabouthimself.

3.素材積累

3.1情緒類素材積累

面帶自豪的微信Wearingaproudsmile膽怯的timidly極其興奮extremelyexcited

面紅耳赤,心跳加速feltbloodrushingontohischeeksandhisheartbeatingfast

3.2優(yōu)秀句型積累

分詞作狀語：

HectorstoppedMr.Adlermid-sentence,holdingouttheopenenvelope.

Hector打斷了Mr.Adler的話，伸手遞出了打開的信封。

Havingbeenuplatestudying,Hectorlookedexhaustedbutextremelyexcited.

虛擬語氣Ifhehadwaitedanothermoment,theywouldhavetornhimintopieces.

無靈主語句：ImmensereliefwashedoverHector.（夸張修辭）他如釋重負(fù)

倒裝句Sodidalltheothercompetitors.其他的比賽選手亦然。

親情感悟類

X.真題鏈接1

（廣東省梅州市2023屆高三一模）

Tom'sfamilywasasmallfamilyonthecoastallineofasmallvillage.Tomwas11yearsold.Hewastall,

darkandhandsomeandhadalotofdreams.Hehadalwaysdreamtoflivinginacity.Hewasalwayshisdad's

charm,ashewasnotquitehappytospendlimewithhismom.Allhecouldrememberabouthismomwasher

scars,redandwhitescarsonherface,neckandhands.Healwaysfeltunpleasanttoseehismom'sface.Butwhat

hedidnotknowwasthathismomscratchedherbeautytosavehimfromafirewhenhewasoneyearold.Not

wantingtoburdenhimwithit,Tom'sparentskeptitasecret.

HismomMariausedtodrophimtoschoolandpickhimupeveryday.Hefeltawkwardtoseehismomwith

thatscarredfacestandinginfrontoftheschoolgate.Ashewaslaughingandchattingwithhisfellowschoolmates,

allofthembecamesilentandstartedstaringatthegate.So,Tomturnedtowardsthegatewithalotofcuriosity.

Hefrozewhenseeinghismom,facecoveredwithapieceofcloth.Tomfeltashamedandrushedoutoftheschool

withlotsofanger.

Withdayspassingby,Tomstartedtodislikehismommore.Hedidnotliketogetpickedupordroppedby

hismom.Hefeltthatshewasuglyandsoabnormal.Ashegrewold,hestoppedgoingoutwithhertothemarket

oranywhereoutside.Kamalatriedherbesttomakehersonhappy,gothimeverythingthathewantedandgave

himhisspace.Sheunderstoodwhathersonwasgoingthroughandfeltpityforherselfandsadforherson,asshe

washelpless.

WhenTomturned16,hewassenttoacityhighschool80kilometersawayfromhiscoastalvillage.Thevery

thoughtofnotbeingwithhisuglymothermadehimveryhappy.

Threeyearslater,thencameTom'sgraduationceremony.Hisparentsdidn'twanttobeabsentfromsuchan

importantoccasion,sotheymanagedtobetherewithoutinformingTom.

Tomwasshockedwhenhesawhisparentsappearattheceremonyhall.

Hesitatingforamoment,Tom'sfathertoldhimeverythingthathappenedmanyyearsago.

2.1整體把握

主題語境人與自我一做人與做事一個人、家庭、社區(qū)及學(xué)校生活

本篇讀后續(xù)寫為記敘文，文章大意為因為媽媽的臉上的傷疤，Tom擔(dān)心被同學(xué)取笑，不樂意媽媽去學(xué)校接送

語篇話題

他，但他不知道媽媽是因為要救他而毀容。在他的高中畢業(yè)典禮上，爸爸媽媽沒有告知他就到了學(xué)校。

when：Tomwas19,athisgraduationceremonywhere：atschoolwho：Tom,Tom^parents

情節(jié)梳理

what：Withoutbeinginformed,Tomfoundhisparentsattendedhisgraduationceremonytogether,whichmightlead

tohisbeinglaughedat.

由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)Tom看到他的父母到達(dá)儀式大廳時，他很震驚?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼慣om的反應(yīng)和

做法，他很生氣，努力地控制著自己，走向爸爸跟前，但是聽到別人議論媽媽的外表，他把媽媽推出了儀式

大廳，看到媽媽傷心地離開，爸爸跟了出去。

情節(jié)走向

由第二段首句內(nèi)容“父親猶豫了一下，把多年前發(fā)生的一切都告訴了他。”可知，第二段可描寫Tom得知真相

后感到后悔，從此以后不再因為媽媽的傷疤而疏遠(yuǎn)媽媽，感恩媽媽無私的愛。

2.2例文賞析

Tomwasshockedwhenhesawhisparentsappearattheceremonyhall.Hestoodrootedtothefloorfora

moment,notknowingwhattodo.Secondslater,hetriedtocontainhimselfandawkwardlywalkeduptogreethis

father,ignoringhismother'sexistence.Butwhenheheardotherswhisperingabouthismum'suglyface,

embarrassmentcameoverhim.Withangerwrittenallonhisface,hepushedhismumhardoutofthehall.Seeing

Tom'smumleavewithdeepsorrow,hisfatherfollowedherout.

Hesitatingfaramoment,Tom'sfathertoldhimeverythingthathappenedmanyyearsago.Hismumgot

burntseverelytosavehiminaterriblefire.Tearsstreameddownhisfacewhenherecollectedhowmuchhehad

hurtheralltheseyears,howhehadignoredherandherealizedtheamountofpainandagonyshehadgone

through.Aftertheceremony,hefoundhismumandembracedher,saying“Sorry“againandagain.Fromthenon,

hethoughtofhismom'sfaceevenwithscarsasthemostbeautifulfaceintheworldandhismomasthemost

respectedwomanintheworld.

3.素材積累

3.1情緒類素材積累

尷尬：embarrassmentcameoverhim生氣：withangerwrittenonhisface哭：tearsstreameddownhis

face

3.2動作類素材積累

——動不動地站著：standrootedtothefloor/standrootedtothespot/standstill/standmotionless

壓制住自己：containoneselfVkeepone'stemper/holdone'stemper擁抱：embrace/hug

1.真題鏈接2（2023廣東春季開學(xué)考）

WhenIwasinGrade10,myfamilyhadatoughtime.MyparentslosttheirjobsduringtheDepression.Dad

wastooilltoworkoutside,whilemumhadahardtimeraisinguskidsonherowninoursmallcommunity.We

reliedonourcommunityassistancetokeepusclothed,andalthoughourclothesweresecond-hand,wethought

theywerebeautiful.

Lookingback,IrealizewhatMumwentthroughforsendinguskidstoschool.Everymorningshewouldput

anewpieceofcardboardinourshoes,becauseourshoeswerewornout.Constantmovingwastypicalformy

familyinthesetimes.Rentwastwenty-fivedollarsamonth,butMumcouldn'tpayit.Thesewerehardandsad

years,butwenevercomplained.

NewYearwasapproaching,andwewereentitledtoatwenty-fivedollarfund