讓英語作文靚起來

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HowtogetyourcompositionpolishedupClothesmaketheman.人要衣裝，佛要金裝。Beautyisthecombinationofthree-tenthsofgiftandseven-tenthsofgrooming.三分長相，七分打扮。Writingtask請你根據(jù)以下提示，結(jié)合生活中的一個事例，用英語寫一篇短文，談談如何學會感激生活。"Gratefulnessmakesusawareofthegiftandmakesushappy.Aslongaswetakethingsforgrantedtheydon'tmakeushappy.Gratefulnessisthekeytohappiness.Practicinggratitudeissocentraltomyspirituality."Whatshouldyoudoifyouwanttowriteagoodcomposition?第一步認真審題(analyzetherequirements）第二步謀篇布局(drawupanoutline)第三步聯(lián)句成篇(organizethesentences)第四步錦上添花(getthearticlepolishedup)第五步查漏補缺(checkthemistakes)第一步認真審題

審主題審體裁審人稱審時態(tài)

審要求TheimportanceofgratefulnessThefirstpersonalPresenttenseforargumentPasttensefornarrativenarrateastoryinyourlifeArgumentativeandnarrative第二步謀篇布局Para.1theimportanceofteamworkPara.2astoryreflectingteamworkPara.3drawaconclusion

第三步聯(lián)句成篇第四步錦上添花

ItwasonthedaywhenitwasmybirthdaylastyearthatIlearnedgratefulness.Iplanedtospendmybirthdaylonely.WhatsurprisedmewasthatwhenIwasrunningtothecanteenIheardafamiliarvoice.Ilookedbackonlytofinditwasmymother.Shebroughtmealforme.Ihadtosaythatmyhousewasfarawayfromtheschool.Itwasdifficulttogettotheschoolfrommyhouse.Littleasthegiftwas,Iwasreallytouchedbytheaction.

ItwasthefirsttimeformetoleavehomeforalongtimewhenIgotintohighmiddleschool.Inordertoimprovemyhealthcondition,mymotheralwaysproduceddeliciousmealsandsenttomyschoolfrommy26milesawayhomeonSaturdays.ButItookitforgrantedandevenscoldedherforbeinglatesometimes.ItwasnotuntiloneofmyclassmatesremindedmeofgratitudedidIrealizehowselfishIwastotreatmymotherinthatway.Fromthenon,Iunderstoodtobegratefulformymother’sdeeplove.ItwasthefirsttimethatIhadleftthat詞匯,句型（高級）和語法多樣化（較復雜）

1.覆蓋了所有的要點

2.應用了較多的語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯

3.有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊要點全連接詞如何算是一篇好文章？

技巧1.使用較高級的詞匯3.使用恰當?shù)倪B接詞2.使用較豐富的句式abundantsentencepatternsproperconjunctionsadvancedwordsandphrases使文章“靚”起來的技巧→

ontheway/aroundthecorner.

Thethanks-givingdayiscoming.

Nowadays,peoplethinkgratefulnessisvery

important.→

beofgreatimportance/significanceattachgreatimportanceto一、使用較高級的詞匯短語優(yōu)先Isawamotherwhowasteachingherbaby

walking.Cameacross/runinto/happentoseeTheoldmanthankedmeformyhelp.Expressedthanks/gratitude/appreciation;wasgratefulfor;wasappreciativeofMymomgavemealot.MadegreatsacrificesforIt

occurredto

/struckmethatIshouldbegratefultolifeinsteadofcomplainingaboutit.IthinkthatIshouldn’tcomplainaboutmylifebutbegratefultolife棄舊取新Ibegantorealizedtheimportanceofgratefulness.Icametobeawareofhowimportantgratefulnessis.Ievenrefusedtolistentomyfather.Ieventurnedadeafeartomyfather.二、使用較豐富的句式用高級和多樣化的句式來表達，能增加文章的文采。在文章中設計雙重否定的句子，就變成了亮點句，起到強調(diào)作用。→

Icouldn’thavemadesomuchprogressinEnglishwithouthishelp.（梅元定）

mymotherneverfailstoproducedmeals…….Mymotheralwaysproduceddeliciousmealsandsenttomeeveryday.(張佰勝)IhavemadegreatprogressinEnglishwithhishelp.肯定不如雙否好

倒裝是一種簡單易行提亮句子的方法。Ididn’trealizeditsimportanceuntilIwasinspired….→

NotuntilIwasinspired….didIrealizedits

importance.Wecanbuildupaharmonioussocietyonlyinthisway.→

Onlyinthiswaycanwebuildupaharmonioussociety.（袁釗）Anoldwomancameontothebus.（裴武雄）→

Ontothebuscameanoldwoman.陳述不如倒裝妙適當使用被動語態(tài)，會呈現(xiàn)句型的變化，使句子表達地道豐富。Webelievethatitisparentsobligationtobringusup,giveusloveandeducateus.Itisbelievedthatitisparents’obligationto…...（王立峰）主動不如被動巧從句在很多情況下可變成分詞結(jié)構(gòu)或省略句，這會是文章中更大的亮點。WhenIseehisbittersmile,IsuddenlyrealizedhowluckyIwas.

SeeingWhenitiscomparedwithothercartoons,

TheWolfandtheSheepismoreinteresting.C從句不如分詞傲將簡單句改為強調(diào)句、感嘆句

簡單句改為強調(diào)句或感嘆句后語氣更強烈、感情更充沛，是不可多得的高級表達方式。2.Tobethankfultolifeisveryimportant.（感嘆句）

→Howimportantitistobethankfultolife!

1.Iknowmyparentsbringmeupandgivemelove.(強調(diào))→Itis

myparentsthatbroughtmeupandloveme.長短句交換：簡單句,復合句和并列句交替使用Ifoundadisabledmansittinginthecornerofahouse.Hehadnohandsandoneofhislegwasdisabled.→Ifoundamanwhohadnohandsandoneofwhoselegwasdisabledaswell.Iwassosorrytohearthat.Igaveallmypocketmoney.→IwassosorrytohearhiswordsthatIgaveallmypocketmoney.

Ifyouappreciatelife,youwillfindlifemorebeautiful.→Appreciatelife,andyouwillfindlifemorebeautiful.名言警句別忘了Gratitudeisthesignofnoblesouls.Gratitudeunlocksthefullnessoflife.GratitudeisourmostdirectlinetoGodandtheangels.

Asansayinggoes:”Gratitudeisthesignofnoblesouls.”weshouldpractiseshowingourappreciationtoourparents,tothedifficultywemeet,toeverythinginourlife.請加上恰當?shù)倪B接詞.1）Ihadahappyfamily.__________,Ihadahealthybody.2）Iturnedadeafeartomyparents.____________,Ievenhurttheirfeelings.3）Itooktheirloveforgranted.__________,theyleftmeandnevercamebackthen.InadditionAsaresultWhat’sworse三、使用恰當?shù)倪B接詞

邏輯角度合適的過渡性詞匯時間順序first,second,then,finally/atlast,soonimmediately,suddenly空間順序here,there,ononeside…ontheotherside,

infrontof,atthebackof,nextto

對稱順序foronething,fortheotherthing,ononehand,ontheotherhand轉(zhuǎn)折順序but,however,while,though,otherwise因果順序because,since,as,thanksto,asaresult(of)條件順序aslongas,solongas,onconditionthat,if,unless讓步順序though,as,evenif/though,whether,who

(what,when,where)ever遞進順序what’smore,besides,tomakethematterworse,what’sworse表示總結(jié)inaword,altogether,allinall,ingeneral使句子“靚”起來的小結(jié)：

簡單句中伴有較高級的詞匯。用豐富和較高級的句式如：雙否定；倒裝句；被動句；分詞；with結(jié)構(gòu)；強調(diào)句和感嘆句；各類型的從句;名言警句等。3.用恰當?shù)倪B接詞，使句子之間更緊湊，連貫。

.Actually,Ididn’trealizeitsimportanceuntilIwasaffectedbyaclassmate.Hisbodyissickandpale.Oneday,Isawhimrunningwithasmilinglook.Itwasstrangethatheissohappyasifhewereastrongman.Hetoldmethatheverythankedlifeeventhoughheissickandpale.Iwasshockedtoheardhisgratefulness.Ialsolearntothanklifebecauselifegiveustoomanygifts.Actually,notuntilIwasaffectedbyaclassmatewhosebodyissickandpaledidIIrealizehowimportantitistobegratefultolife.Oneday,IwasdoingmorningexercisewhenIsuddenly

sawhewasrunningaswellwithahappylookingonhisface

,asifhewereastrongman.Seeing

mycuriosity,hetoldmethatheappreciatelifedespitehisillness.Iwasshockedtohearthat.However,Icametobegratefultolifebecauselifegivemeahealthbodyatleast.(吳兵)Homework:Rewriteyourcompositiontomakeitmore“beautiful”!Infact,Ididn’trealizetheimportanceofbeinggratefultomylifeuntilIwasinspiredbyadisabledperson.Longbefore,IoftencomplainedthatIwasbornincountrysideandmyfamilywassopoorthatIcouldn’tgetnewclothes.Duringthattime,Ifeltsadandwasinlowspirit.Ioftendreamedabouthavingrichparents,havingmanytoysandnewclothesandshoes.ButonedaywhenIwaswanderingonthestreet,Ifoundadisabledmansittinginthecornerof