2023-2024學(xué)年高一上學(xué)期讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)入門課件（三）

野營(yíng)虛驚一場(chǎng)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)（三）情節(jié)內(nèi)容試題導(dǎo)練試題展示BellawasonlyfiveanditwasherfirstcampingtripwithMumandDad.Shewasexcitedbutwasalittlenervoustoo.Whatifthetentfallsoverandsquashes(壓扁)us?Whatifthewindblowsitaway?hatifawolfcomesintothetentandeatsus?”shekeptaskingMum.ThismadeMumlaugh.Bellahadreadtoomanyfairystorieswithbigbadwolvesinthem.MumcomfortedBellasayingthatthereweren'tanywolvesinthecityoreveninthewholecountry,exceptinzoos.“Well,whatifoneescapedfromaZ00?”askedBella.Mumlaughed,“Zooswerecarefulenoughnottolettheiranimalsescape.”ThenBellasoonforgotaboutwolvesastheystartedplanningforthecampingtrip.試題展示

BellahelpedDadloadupthecar.Theyputinthetent,abigoneforthewholefamily.Thenthesleepingbags,blanketsandmore.“It'scoldatnightwhenyou'resleepinginatent,”addedDad.Wheneverythingwaspacked,thecarwasfulltoburstingDadstartedthecar,andsoontheywereleavingthecitybehindthem.“Lookatthehills!”shoutedMumexcitedly.“Lookatthecowsonthegrass!”Theydroveupawindingroaduntiltheyreachedthecampsite,whichbelongedtoafarmandwasinabigfield.Oncethetentwasup,Bellawenttoexplore.Thereweretreestoclimbandastreamforpaddling(隆水).Bellasattherewatchingthecowseatingthegrass.Thedayflewbyanditwasgettingdark

Astheywerereadyforsleep,strangerustling(沙沙聲)camefromthefencenexttotheirtentinthedarkness.“What'sthatnoise?Isitawolfapproaching?”BellaworriedandmovedclosertoMum.“Maybeit'sjustthewind,’MumgentlypattedBella.Belladidn'tsayanythingmore.Theywerealltiredafteradayoutdoors,andcrawledinto(爬進(jìn))theirsleepingbags.SoonMumandDadwereasleep試題展示注意:續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為80左右Bellawastoonervoustofallasleepwhensheheardthatnoiseagain.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________試題展示①人物：Bella（5歲）；Mum；Dad②情節(jié)線：

文本分析Thefamilyenjoyedthebeautifulscenery.Athome

OntheroadAtthecampsiteBellaworriedaboutthecomingtrip;Mumcomfortedher.BellahelpedDadloadupthecar.Theysetupthetent.Bellaexplored.Beforesleeping,Bellaheardrustlingnoisesandwasnervous.③主題：對(duì)世界保持好奇心，積極探索。④情感線：

本文最主要的人物是5歲的Bella，她在文中的情感變化為：excitedbutwasalittlenervous→forgotaboutwolves→happy→worriedandmovedclosertoMum→?

這是Bella第一次野營(yíng)，她興奮之余也略感擔(dān)憂。母親的安慰和臨行前的準(zhǔn)備工作讓她暫時(shí)忘卻自己的擔(dān)憂。一家人開(kāi)車向營(yíng)地駛?cè)?，沿途的山和食草的牛給他們的旅途增添了快樂(lè)。到營(yíng)地安頓好以后，Bella開(kāi)心地開(kāi)始了自己的探索——爬樹(shù)、蹚水、看牛吃草。夜幕降臨，Bella聽(tīng)到沙沙聲后開(kāi)始擔(dān)心害怕，媽媽安慰了她。

思考：根據(jù)閱讀部分的情感線，并結(jié)合給出句，在接下來(lái)的續(xù)寫(xiě)部分，Bella的情感可能會(huì)有哪些變化？再次聽(tīng)到沙沙聲后，Bella又變得緊張起來(lái)→沙沙聲越來(lái)越近以后，Bella變得害怕起來(lái)→搞清楚真相后，Bella終于放下心來(lái)。文本分析①第一、二段：

Whatifawolfcomesintothetentandeatsus?(para.1)Well,whatifoneescapedfromazoo?(para.2)

思考：開(kāi)篇兩段描述了Bella的各種擔(dān)心，尤其著墨于“狼來(lái)了怎么辦”。那么，再次聽(tīng)到沙沙聲時(shí)，Bella會(huì)不會(huì)以為狼來(lái)了？

②第四段：

“Lookatthecowsonthegrass!”Bellasattherewatchingthecowseatingthegrass.本段兩次提到牛吃草，一次是在旅途中，一次是在野營(yíng)地。

思考：文章結(jié)尾提到的沙沙聲到底是什么聲音？本段牛吃草的情節(jié)是不是可以給續(xù)寫(xiě)部分一種暗示？細(xì)讀語(yǔ)言③尾段：

“Maybeit'sjustthewind,”MumgentlypattedBella.

思考：在尾段，母親認(rèn)為沙沙聲可能是風(fēng)聲。Bella最后發(fā)現(xiàn)的真相有沒(méi)有可能正如母親所言？BellaworriedandmovedclosertoMum.

思考：Bella只有5歲，她第一次聽(tīng)到沙沙聲后的身體反應(yīng)是靠向母親。深沉的夜里，她再次聽(tīng)到沙沙聲，會(huì)不會(huì)向母親（或父母）求助？

SoonMumandDadwereasleep.

思考：等Bella搞清楚真相后，驚魂已定的她是不是也可以像父母一樣安然入睡？細(xì)讀語(yǔ)言④高頻詞：

camp,tent,whatif在閱讀部分反復(fù)出現(xiàn)。其中，camp,tent是與主題“野營(yíng)”相關(guān)的重點(diǎn)詞匯；whatif則反映出Bella第一次野營(yíng)時(shí)的各種擔(dān)心，也符合一個(gè)5歲孩子的心理。

思考：這些高頻詞在續(xù)寫(xiě)部分有沒(méi)有可能再出現(xiàn)？如果出現(xiàn)，應(yīng)出現(xiàn)在何種情境中？細(xì)讀語(yǔ)言關(guān)鍵詞：nervous,noise；首句譯文：當(dāng)Bella再次聽(tīng)到那個(gè)沙沙聲時(shí)，她緊張得無(wú)法入睡。續(xù)寫(xiě)部分預(yù)測(cè)：1）隨著沙沙聲越來(lái)越近，Bella變得害怕起來(lái)；2）Bella想向母親（或父母）求助；3）Bella發(fā)現(xiàn)沙沙聲原來(lái)是一頭牛吃草的聲音；

或

Bella發(fā)現(xiàn)沙沙聲就是風(fēng)聲。4）Bella如釋重負(fù)，爬進(jìn)睡袋，安然入睡。研讀首句微寫(xiě)作練習(xí)環(huán)境描寫(xiě)擴(kuò)充句子：

Acowwaseatingsomegrass.①Acowwaseatingsomegrass________(平靜地).②________________________(襯著皎潔的月光),acowwaseatingsomegrass.peacefullyAgainstthemoonlight微寫(xiě)作練習(xí)動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)寫(xiě)出下列短語(yǔ)：

聽(tīng)起來(lái)像________________

闖入________________

改變主意________________把頭伸出帳篷________________

爬回________________soundlikebreakintochangeone’smindstickone’sheadoutofthetentcrawlback微寫(xiě)作練習(xí)動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)2.轉(zhuǎn)換表達(dá)：①Bella嚇得睡不著覺(jué)，渾身發(fā)抖。Bellalayawakeandshivered.Bellalayawake,________(動(dòng)詞-ing形式).②Bella如釋重負(fù)。

Bellafeltrelieved.Bellabreathed________________________________(名詞短語(yǔ)).Bellasighed________________(介詞短語(yǔ)).shiveringasignofreliefinrelief微寫(xiě)作練習(xí)動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)3.擴(kuò)充句子：①Bella再也無(wú)法忍受了。Bellacouldn'tbearit.Bellacouldn'tbearit________________(再).②Bella觀察了很久，沒(méi)發(fā)現(xiàn)任何跡象。Therewasnosignofwolvesoranythingelse.After________________________________(恍如隔世),therewasnosignofwolvesoranythingelse.anylonger/anymorewhatseemslikehours/ages微寫(xiě)作練習(xí)動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)③Bella回去睡覺(jué)。Bellawentbacktosleep.Bellawentbacktosleep,________(酣然地).soundly微寫(xiě)作練習(xí)銜接連貫合并句子：Therustlingseemedtobemovinginherdirection.ItmadeBella'sbodytrembleandhermouthdry.

Therustlingseemedtobemovinginherdirection,________________________________________________________________________(定語(yǔ)從句).2.Shewonderedwhatwashappening.Suddenly,sheheardmorerustling.

Shewonderedwhatwashappening________(連詞)suddenly,sheheardmorerustling.whichmadeBella'sbodytrembleandhermouthdrywhen/and微寫(xiě)作練習(xí)銜接連貫合并句子：3.Bellasatupandunzippedthetent.Shelookedinthedirectionofthenoise.

________________________________________________(動(dòng)詞-ing形式),Bellalookedinthedirectionofthenoise.Sittingupandunzippingthetent范文展示（一）

Bellawastoonervoustofallasleepwhensheheardthatnoiseagain.Shewonderedwhatwashappeningwhensuddenly,sheheardmorerustling.Itsoundedlikesomethingwalkingaroundoutside.“Thiscampsiteisjustthekindofplaceawolfmightlike.Whatifawolfdidescapefromazoo?”Bellalayawake,shivering,astherustlingcontinued.Afterwhatseemedlikeages,Bellacouldn'tbearitanylonger.Shecreptoutofthesleepingbagandstuckherheadoutofthetent.There,againstthemoonlight,acowwaseat