2024屆高考讀后續(xù)寫思維模型構(gòu)建：一勤身心皆富足一惰一生唯余憾篇課件

讀后續(xù)寫

[Onceuponatime],therewasafarmer(calledRipVanWinkle).Helivedinavillageinthemountainswithhiswifeandtwoyoungchildren,adaughterandason.Ripwasaveryhappyandkindmanandhegotonwellwithallthechildreninthevillage.Theylovedhimbecauseheplayedgameswiththemandoftentoldthemstorieswhilehewassittingoutsidethe“KingGeorge”,thevillageinn.Hespentalotoftimeintheinnbecausehewasaverylazyman.[Insteadof]workingonhisfarm,hewould

gofishingorhunting,orsitinthevillageinntalkingtohisfriends.Hisfamilywaspoorandhiswifeusedto

getangrywithhim.“Whatkindoffarmerareyou?”Shewouldask.“Whydon’tyougetdowntosomework,youlazyman!”

Afterargumentswithhiswife,Ripalwayswentoffhuntingwithhisdog,Wolf.Oneday,afteranotherargument,Ripwentfurtherthanusualintothewoodsandcametoabeautifulvalley.Suddenly,heheardastrangevoicecallinghisname.Anoldman,(dressedin

old-fashionedclothes),wastryingtocarryabarrel(桶)andaskedRiptohelphim.Ripagreed.Theytookthebarreltoacave,(wherethereweremorepeople,alldressedinthesamestrangeclothes.)Afterthat,theoldmangave/Rip/adrinkfromthebarrel.Ripimmediatelyfellintoadeepsleep.What/HowWhen/WhereWhoWhy文本解讀SettingCharacterPlotTheme

Whenwhowhereonceuponatime

afarmer(calledRipVanWinkle).Narrator敘事者“thirdperson”perspective第三人稱視角Tense:________________SimplepasttenseMom文本解讀SettingCharacteravalley&amountainvillageCharacteranalysisDetails.文本解讀.....

Ripwasaveryhappyandkindmanandhegotonwellwithallthechildreninthevillage.Theylovedhimbecauseheplayedgameswiththemandoftentoldthemstorieswhilehewassittingoutsidethe“KingGeorge”,thevillageinn.....

....[Insteadof]workingonhisfarm,hewould

gofishingorhunting,orsitinthevillageinntalkingtohisfriends.Hisfamilywaspoorandhiswifeusedto

getangrywithhim........Ripwentfurtherthanusualintothewoodsandcametoabeautifulvalley.Suddenly,heheardastrangevoicecallinghisname.Anoldman,(dressedin

old-fashionedclothes),

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WorkouttheconflictortheclimaxBeginningDevelopmentConflictClimax/Ending[Insteadof]workingonhisfarm,hewouldgofishingorhunting,orsitinthevillageinntalkingtohisfriends.Hisfamilywaspoorandhiswifeusedtogetangrywithhim.Remembertosolvetheconflict.

[Onceuponatime],therewasafarmer(calledRipVanWinkle).whospentalotoftimeintheinnbecausehewasaverylazyman.文本解讀+創(chuàng)設情境Hecameacrossanoldman,(dressedinold-fashionedclothes),inthedeepwoodswhowastryingtocarryabarrel(桶)andaskedRiptohelphim.Theytookthebarreltoacave,(wherethereweremorepeople,alldressedinthesamestrangeclothes.)Afterthat,theoldmangave/Rip/adrinkfromthebarrel.Ripimmediatelyfellintoadeepsleep.PlotA.

alazyfarmer.B.ahappy-go-luckyfarmer.C.Lazinessruinsamananddiligengcemakesameaningfulandhappylife.....“Whydon’tyougetdowntosomework,youlazyman!”.

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線索文本解讀+主題探究Theme

【Paragraph1】Sometimelater,hewokeupunderatreeinthesamevalley.

根據(jù)第1自然段給出的首句，尤其是根據(jù)第2自然段首句Whenhegottohishouse,hesawthatitwasoldandabandoned.

大致可以判定：第一自然段應該描寫主人公在山谷中酒醒之后所見所聞所感，而且，應該是比較令人驚異的發(fā)現(xiàn)。因為第2自然段首句提供的信息。

創(chuàng)設情節(jié)突出主題Analyzethe2givensentencesandtheoriginalpassageAddsomedetailsbyraisingquestions

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Analyzethe2givensentencesandtheoriginalpassageAddsomedetailsbyraisingquestions

Whenhegottohishouse,hesawthatitwasoldandabandoned.

根據(jù)第2自然段首句

大致可以判定：主人公在山谷中應該邂逅了仙人，洞中忽一日，世上已逾年。可以朝著這個方向發(fā)散思維，構(gòu)思情節(jié)，方能達到完美收尾效果。

所見所聞所感所思外貌描寫環(huán)境描寫語言描寫動作描寫心理描寫情感描寫所見所做所感Appearance/SurroundingsConversations/LanguagesBehavior/Actions/VerbsEmotions/Feelings通過細節(jié)描寫呈現(xiàn)出情節(jié)的________跌宕起伏UP---DOWN--UPUsethedescriptivetechniquestoenrichthedetails創(chuàng)設情節(jié)突出主題

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Sometimelater,hewokeupunderatreeinthesamevalley.Hewasalone,[worriedabouthisdog]andheknewhewasgoingtogetintomoretroublewithhiswife.Thenhenoticedacuriousthing-----hishairwasoverhisshouldersandhisbeardwasoverafootlong![Sostrange]washe

thathedecidedimmediatelytogetbacktothevillage.Assoonashegotthere,herealizedthateverythingwasdifferentandtherewerelotsofnewhouses.[Surprisingly],hedidn’trecognizethepeopleinthevillage.語言描寫范文賞析心理描寫

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Whenhegottohishouse,hesawthatitwasoldandabandoned.