人物作文仿寫技巧練習(xí)

作文仿寫1請以“TheFirstChinesetoSpace”為題，根據(jù)下面的提示寫一篇介紹我國執(zhí)行首次載人航天飛行任務(wù)的航天英雄楊利偉的短文。姓名楊利偉年齡38出生地遼寧省主要經(jīng)歷中國遨游太空第一人.被選為宇航員之前，曾是我軍一名非常優(yōu)秀的飛行員.于2003年10月15日上午9：00乘坐“神舟”五號飛船飛向太空，并于次日晨6時許安全返回地面。在空中停留的21小時23分鐘的時間里，他隨飛船繞行地球14周，其間，他拍攝的一些照片。返回后對他的各項醫(yī)療檢查表明，他的身體狀況良好。人們將永遠銘記這位英雄，因為是他實現(xiàn)了我們幾千年的夢想。第一頁第二頁，共18頁。a.用過去分詞翻譯下列句子

1)出生于一個小村莊，她夢想著上一個理想的大學(xué)。2)22歲時，她畢業(yè)于山東大學(xué)。3）受到導(dǎo)師的鼓勵，她決定專心致志的研究她所感興趣的。4）她為教育事業(yè)作出了巨大的貢獻，被認為是我們學(xué)校最優(yōu)秀的教師。第二頁第三頁，共18頁。b.用現(xiàn)在分詞或完成式表達經(jīng)歷1）畢業(yè)以后，她去了一個小學(xué)教書。2）她為教育事業(yè)作出了巨大的貢獻，被認為是我們學(xué)校最優(yōu)秀的教師。3）在研究農(nóng)業(yè)的時候，袁隆平也關(guān)注農(nóng)民的是生活。第三頁第四頁，共18頁。c.介詞和介詞短語的使用1）由于導(dǎo)師的鼓勵，她決定專心致志的研究她所感興趣的。2）通過她的努力，她完成了大學(xué)的學(xué)業(yè)。3）作為中國最偉大的科學(xué)家之一，袁隆平一直過著很簡樸的生活。4）和其她女孩子一樣，我也喜歡漂亮的衣服。5）在大學(xué)期間，她對文學(xué)感興趣。第四頁第五頁，共18頁。d.whose/where/when引導(dǎo)的定語從句1）他出生于一個小鎮(zhèn)，在那兒他度過了他快樂的童年。2）袁隆平的成就得到了世界的公認，為世界的糧食問題作出了巨大的貢獻。3）他于2008年畢業(yè)于北大，那年，第29屆奧運會在北京舉辦。第五頁第六頁，共18頁。e.其它技巧：用同位語代替定語從句時間狀語的靈活運用和置于句首，長短句的交叉使用，連接詞的使用第六頁第七頁，共18頁。ThefirstChinesetotraveltospace易錯單詞safely/safetychoose–chose---chosen--choiceexcellentexaminationfly--flew–flownphysicallyhealthy/physicalhealthrealizeourChinesedreamofthousandsyears.=makeourdreamcometrue第七頁第八頁，共18頁。掌握下列句型，不要再錯1.Beforebeingchosenasanastronaut,hewasanexcellentpilot.(afterdoing)2.Heusedtobeapilot.hewasusedtobeingapilot.thepenwasusedtowrite.3.Hewasthefirst/last/only/secondChinesetotraveltospace.hewasthefirstChinesewhotraveledtospace.第八頁第九頁，共18頁。時刻的表達At9a.monOctober15th,heflewintospaceaboardtheShenZhou5andlandedsafelytotheearthat6thenextmorning.OnOctober15th,heflewintospaceaboardtheShenZhou5at6inthemorningandreturnedsafetotheearthat6a.mthenextday.第九頁第十頁，共18頁。在期間Duringthe21hoursand23minuteswhenhestayedinspace,heorbitedtheearth14times,takingagreatmanyphotos.Hestayedinspacefor21hoursand23minutes,duringwhichtimeheorbitedtheearth14timesandtookagreatmanyphotos.Hestayedinspacefor21hoursand23minutesandorbitedtheearth14times.Inthemeantime,hetookagreatmanyphotos第十頁第十一頁，共18頁。邏輯主語一致Havingreturnedtotheearth,hehadhisbodyexamined,whichshowedthathewascompletelyhealthy.Afterreturningtotheearth,hehadhisbodyexamined,whichshowedthathewascompletelyhealthyAfterhereturnedtotheearth,thephysicalexaminationshowedthathisbodywasingoodcondition.第十一頁第十二頁，共18頁。強調(diào)句型的使用(主要強調(diào)狀語）Itwasat9a.monOctober15ththatheflewintospaceaboardtheShenZhou5.ItwasnotuntilheflewintospacethatourChinesedreamcametrue.ItwasbecauseherealizedourdreamthatweChinesewillrememberhimforever.ItwasinthisvilllagethatIwasborn.Itishethat/whorealizedourdream.Itishimthat/whoweChinesewillkeepinmindforever.第十二頁第十三頁，共18頁。YangLiwei,whowasborninLiaolinProvincein1971,isthefirstpersonwhotravelledtospaceinChina.Heusedtobeanexcellentpilotbeforehebecameanastronaut.Itwasat9a.monthe15thOctober,2003thathebeganhisfirstflighttospace.Havingorbitedtheearthfor14hoursinspace,Yanggotbacktotheearthwithsafetyat6amon16th.Duringthe21hoursand23minuteshespentinspace,hetooksomevaluablephotos.Thephysicalexaminationshowedthathewasphysicallyhealthyafterhereturnedtotheearth.OnaccountofhisaccomplishmentfortheChinese’sdreamofthousandsofyears,YangwillberememberedbyusChinese.第十三頁第十四頁，共18頁。YangLiwei,whowasborninLiaolinProvincein1971,isthefirstpersonwhotravelledtospaceinChina.Heusedtobeanexcellentpilotbeforehebecameanastronaut.Itwasat9a.monthe15thOctober,2003thathebeganhisfirstflighttospace.Havingorbitedtheearthfor14hoursinspace,Yanggotbacktotheearthwithsafetyat6amon16th.Duringthe21hoursand23minuteshespentinspace,hetooksomevaluablephotos.Thephysicalexaminationshowedthathewasphysicallyhealthyafterhereturnedtotheearth.OnaccountofhisaccomplishmentfortheChinese’sdreamofthousandsofyears,YangwillberememberedbyusChinese.(郭敏怡）第十四頁第十五頁，共18頁。BorninLiaolinProvince,YangLiwei,thefirstmanwhotraveledtospaceinChinese,wasa38-year-oldman.Beforebeingelectedasanastronaut,hewasagreatpilotinourarmy.At9a.m,15thOctober,2003,heflewintotheuniversebytheShenzhou5Spaceshipandreturnedtotheearthsafeat6a.mthenextday.Heandhisspaceshiporbitedtheearth14rounds,whichlasted21hoursand23minutes.Inthemeanwhile,hetooksomephotos,whichcontributedtothestudyofspace.Havingreturnedtotheearth,hehadmedicalexaminations,whichshowedthathisbodywasingoodcondition.Withthisachievement,peoplewillrememberthisheroforeverowingtothefactthatitishethataccomplishesourdreamofthousandsofyears.第十五頁第十六頁，共18頁。

BorninLiaolinProvince,YangLiwei,thefirstmanwhotraveledtospaceinChinese,wasa38-year-oldman.Beforebeingelectedasanastronaut,hewasagreatpilotinourarmy.At9a.m,15thOctober,2003,heflewintotheuniversebytheShenzhou5Spaceshipandreturnedtotheearthsafeat6a.mthenextday.Heandhisspaceshiporbitedtheearth14rounds,whichlasted21hoursand23minutes.Inthemeanwhile,hetooksomephotos,whichcontributedtothestudyofspace.Havingretu