高中英語：如何寫建議信名師優(yōu)質(zhì)課獲獎市賽課一等獎課件

書面表示專題---Howtowritealetterforadvice第1頁怎樣算是一篇好文章？－覆蓋了全部關(guān)鍵點－應用了較多語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯－有效地使用了語句間連接成份，使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，行文連貫，條理清楚。關(guān)鍵點全詞匯,句型（高級）和語法多樣化（較復雜）語言地道連接詞第2頁寫作關(guān)鍵點：1.提議信：作者就相關(guān)問題進行分析并針對這些問題提出自己看法和提議。2.對象：1）寫給個人，就其碰到某個問題提出自己看法和觀點；2）寫給某個組織和機構(gòu)，就改進其服務提出提議或忠言。第3頁3.基本框架：開頭（beginning）----開門見山，向?qū)Ψ疥愓f自己觀點.(stateyouridea)主體(body)----對所提出問題進行分析并說明理由，接著提出自己提議(reasonsandevidence)結(jié)尾(ending)----呼應開頭，重申觀點(restateyouropinion.)第4頁4.注意事項：1）提議信要寫出寫信原因，提議內(nèi)容，提出提議理由，提出理由要入情入理，語氣一定要禮貌當先。所以提議信要寫得簡明扼要、目標明確、含有合理性和說服力；2）提議角度要多樣化，防止重復?？蓮恼?、經(jīng)濟、文化、倫理、法律以及個人等多角度給出提議；3）符合英文信件基本格式；4）基本時態(tài)多用普通現(xiàn)在時和普通未來時。第5頁慣用套語A．提議信開頭慣用句式

(照應材料,表明寫作意圖)1.AfterIreadyourletterinthenewspaper,Iamsorrytoknowthat…2.Iamverygladtohearthatyouwantto…3.Iknowyouhavetroublein…afterreadingyourletterIamwritingtoyouforthepurposeof…Iamwritingtosharesomeadvice/opinionswithyou.Youhaveaskedmeforsomeadvicewithregardto…andIwilltrytomakesomeconductivesuggestions.7.Youhaveaskedmeformyadviceabout/on…第6頁B.表示提議（body）1.Ithinkitwouldbemorebeneficialifyoucould…2.Iwouldliketosuggest/recommendthat…3.IfIwereyou,Iwould…4.Whynot…?/How(What)aboutdoing…5.…isagood/greatidea.6.Youmayconsiderdoing…7.Itwouldseem/seemstomethatyoucould…8.Inmyopinion,itwouldbewisetotakethefollowingaction.9.Whenitcomestosuchasituation,Iwouldliketosuggestthatyoushould…

First,/Firstly,/Secondly,/Then,/Afterthat,/Intheend,/Finally,/Meanwhile,/What’smore,/Inaddition,/Besides,/Furthermore,…第7頁C.提議信結(jié)尾慣用句式

Ibelieveyouwilltakemyadviceintoaccount/consideration.Ihopeyouwillfindtheseproposals/suggestions/recommendationspractical/useful/helpful.Iwillbemorethanhappytoseeimprovementsinthisregard.Iwouldappreciateitverymuchifyoucouldconsidermysuggestions.5.Ifeelthatitwouldbebeneficialifyousticktoit.Intheend,Iwillbegladifyoufindmysuggestionsuseful.第8頁假如你叫孫軍，是紅星高中學生，要給市長寫一封信，反應學校門前交通擁擠現(xiàn)象，包含以下關(guān)鍵點：參考詞匯:穿行threadone’sway天橋overpass問題提議學校和一所小學毗鄰，對著大街，高峰期交通繁忙；加之孩子小,家長接送。交通更擁擠；學生過街在車輛中穿行危險。政府應采取方法,如修天橋等。第9頁第一步：審題養(yǎng)成重視審題習慣。即使基礎(chǔ)寫作題是半封閉性，但審題依然十分主要?，F(xiàn)以樣題為例，談談怎樣審題：思索問題樣題分析第幾人稱？（person）文章體裁是什么？要寫文章主題是什么(topic)怎樣安排信息點次序？(order)動作是什么時候發(fā)生？(時態(tài))(when)第一人稱一封信提議政府采取辦法舒緩交通擁擠情況說理邏輯性普通現(xiàn)在時第10頁書面表示怎樣寫？三個步驟Step1ListthekeypointsStep2MakesentencesStep3.Formapassageandpolish第11頁適當利用模板第12頁模板二：Dear_____(對象)，Iamwritingtoexpressmyviewsconcerning______(問題).Firstandforthemost,_______(提議一).Inaddition,_____(提議二).What’smore_____(提議三).Ihopeyou’llfindtheseproposalsuseful.Yourssincerely,LiMing第13頁Dear____,Youhaveaskedmeformyadvicewithregardto_____,andI’lltrytomakesomeconductivesuggestionshere.Inmyhumbleopinion(以我拙見),youwouldbewisetotakethefollowingactions:_____.Ihopeyou’llfindtheseproposalsusefulandIwouldbereadytodiscussthismatterwithyoutofurtherdetails.Goodluckwithyou/your______(祝福).YourssincerelyLiMing第14頁DearBob, I'mgladtoreceiveyourletteraskingformyadviceonhowto

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問題提議學校和一所小學毗鄰，對著大街，高峰期交通繁忙；加之孩子小,家長接送。交通更擁擠；學生過街在車輛中穿行危險。政府應采取辦法,如修天橋等。

第16頁學校與一所小學毗鄰,對著大街standnextto…primary…face/befacedwith…themainstreet…There’saprimaryschoolnearourschool,andbothschoolsfacethemainstreet.Ourschoolstandsnexttoaprimaryschool,facedwith/facingthemainstreet.推薦句型：Therebe+并列句非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)Standingnexttoaprimaryschool,ourschoolisfacedwith/facesthemainstreet.第17頁潤色小提議Nexttoaprimaryschool將介詞短語提前（全倒裝）stands/lies/isourschool,facedwith/facingamainstreet.可將standnextto替換為高級詞匯/短語belocatednextto(near/beside/by)border/adjoinvt.beadjacentto與…毗鄰在…對面beoppositeto第18頁

Thetrafficisbusyduringtherushhours.高峰期交通繁忙…..traffic….duringtherushhoursDuringtherushhours,therearesomanycarsandbusesgoingontheroadthat…Duringtherushhours,thereisalotoftraffic.so….that…with結(jié)構(gòu)Withsomanycarsandbusesgoingontheroad,…第19頁潤色小提議“高峰期”可意譯:atpeaktime，alargecurrentofcarsandpeople“交通繁忙”可譯為:trafficjamcongestion交通堵塞bechokeupwithbecrammedwith被…堵塞/塞滿第20頁

加之孩子小,家長接送,交通更擁擠send…to…,fetch….,which…

非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)….Manyparentssendtheiryoungchildrentoschoolandfetchthemhome,whichmakesthetrafficheavier.Manyparentssendtheiryoungchildrentoschoolandfetchthemhome,makingthetrafficheavier.第21頁加之孩子小，家長接送，交通更擁擠What’smore,…pickup….make….Tomakethings

worse/What’sworse,manyparentscomingtopickuptheirchildrenmakethestreetmorecrowded.Inaddition/Additionally,manyparentssendtheiryoungchildrentoschoolandfetchthemhome,whichmakesthetrafficheavier.What’smore,parentsoftenattendtheirkidstoschool,resultinginmoreserioustrafficjams.Whatmakesthingsworseisthatchildrenhavetobepickedupbytheirparentsowingtotheiryoungage.第22頁makingthesituationmoreserious.makingthetrafficheavier可意譯為：so….that….=too…toThechildrenaresoyoungthatparentshavetosendthemtoschoolandfetchthemhome,which

makes/makingthetrafficheavier.making可替換為：causing,leadingto,resultingin“send…fetch…”可替換為短語：pickup潤色小提議第23頁

學生過街在車輛中穿行危險threadone’sway，whendoingItisdangerousforthestudentstothreadtheirwayamongbusesandcarswhencrossingtheroad.固定句型Itis+adj.for…todo….第24頁Studentsarerisking

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tothreadtheirwayamongcars.潤色小提議2.Someareexposedtodangerwhencrossingtheocean/seaofcars.

靈活利用其它短語進行意譯：

適當增加形容詞和副詞：itisextremelydangerous，itisofgreat/tremendousdanger第25頁suggest/suggestion,

takesteps/measures/actiontodo…suchas政府應采取辦法,如修天橋等。Mysuggestionisthatthegovernmentshould…表語從句固定句型Itishightimethat…(虛擬語氣)Itishightimethatrelevantauthoritiestooksomemeasureslikebuilding…Isuggestthatthegovernmentshouldtakestepssuchasbuildinganoverpass.簡單句第26頁1.Inordertoreleasethestressoftrafficproblems,…潤色小提議2.Aimedatsolvingtheseproblems,thegovernmentshould…A.適當添加一些意思（過渡句）Thegovernment

shouldpaymoreattentiontoitandtrytosolveit.B.語義意譯3.Seeingthesematters,neverwillIstopurgingourgovernmenttotakesomemeasures.Forthesakeofimprovingthequalityoftraffic,itissignificanttobuild…C.添加形容詞和副詞Istronglysuggest…,active/effectivemeasures第27頁第三步.連句成文但要注意：篇章連貫性Nexttoaprimaryschoolstandsourschool,facingamainstreet.___________,it’scrammedwithcarsduringtherushhour._______________childrenhavetobepickedupbytheirparentsowingtotheiryoungage.___________,it’sofgreatdangerforthestudentstogothroughthetraffic._________________,itishightimethatrelevantauthoritiestooksomemeasureslikebuildinganoverpass.A.AsaconsequenceB.AccordingtothephenomenonstatedaboveC.WhenitcomestotrafficjamsD.WhatmakesthingsworseisthatA.C.D.B.第28頁反面范例第29頁反面范例第30頁反面范例第31頁反面范例第32頁不推薦字體第33頁優(yōu)點：考生能靈活地處理各個信息點，大量利用非謂語，介詞短語，從句，連詞等來提亮句子，使得文章更彰顯個性和語言功底。優(yōu)異作文范例1第34頁優(yōu)異作文范例2優(yōu)點：考生書面整齊，字體美觀，利用therebe句型，介詞短語，從句，非謂語，套用句式等來提亮句子，使得文章更彰顯內(nèi)涵和語言功底。第35頁優(yōu)異作文范例3優(yōu)點：考生利用倒裝句，so…that句式，精彩表示以及虛擬語氣等來提亮句子，使得文章更彰顯內(nèi)涵和語言功底。第36頁優(yōu)異作文范例4優(yōu)點：該考生最大特色是利用了大量高級詞匯等來提亮句子，使得文章更彰顯深厚語言底蘊。第37頁第38頁優(yōu)異作文范例5第39頁優(yōu)異作文范例6第40頁Congestionn.阻塞,擁擠,充血第41頁第42頁怎樣給閱卷人以好第一直觀印象整體三部分Heading點題；一兩個句子；概括性；暗示性2.Body

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小結(jié)；呼應主題第43頁

假定你是李華，你英國朋友Peter來信向你咨詢怎樣才能學好漢字。

注意：可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；開頭語已給出。DearPeter,

I'mgladtoreceiveyourletteraskingformyadvicenohowtolearnChinesewell._________________________________________________Bestwishes,LiHua參加漢字學習班；看電視，報紙，雜志；學唱漢字歌曲；交中國朋友；第44頁DearPeter, I'mgladtoreceiveyourletteraskingformyadviceonhowtolearnChinesewell.

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TheywilltellyoualotaboutChinaandhelpyoulearnChinese. TrywritingtomeinChinesenexttime.Bestwishes,LiHua第45頁為了迎接即將到來期末考試，你校要取消全部體育課。請你以學生王麗身份給校長寫一封信，提議不要取消體育課。注意：1.詞數(shù)：120左右；2.文章開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)。DearHeadmaster,I’mwritingtoexpressmyviewsconcerningourschool’sdecisionthatallphysicaleducationshouldbecancelled.第46頁常見連接詞表時間關(guān)系：

when/after/before/until/not…untilassoonas/later/afterwards/soon/lately/recently/since/eventually/fromthenon/inthemeanwhile(meantime)/then/finally/atlast/allofasudden/afterawhile/sincethen/immediately/instantly/everytime/eachtime/thefirsttime第47頁常見連接詞羅列觀點：●Firstly/Firstofall/Tobeginwith/Aboveall/Inthefirstplace/OnonehandForonething,●Secondly/Besides/Apartfrom…/What’smore,/Inaddition，/Furthermore,/Moreover，/Worsestill,/Tomakemattersworse,/aswe