讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)課件

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讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)1Steps步驟：

AReadingBPredictingCWritingcharactersplotthemesortoutkeyinformationproperlanguageSteps步驟：AReadingBPredictingCW2CharactersJack------Linda----Jack'swifeneedmoneyforoperationaclerkatthelocalbankplanatheft(n偷盜)CharactersJack------Jack'swi3PlotHowdidJacksteal?Didhesucceed?Thenextday,hewenttoworkasusual.Everythingseemednormal:hejokedwithhisworkmatesandhelpedhisclientsashealwaysdid.Butnoonenoticedthathehadbroughtabiggersuitcasetowork,insteadofthesmallonehealwayscarried.At5:00pm,thebankclosed,andtheclerksandtheguardshadallgonehome.However,atthatmoment,Jackwasinthebathroom,andtheguardsdidn'tnoticehim,ofcourse.Whenthenoisescomingfromthestreetwerereplacedbysilenceandeverythingturneddark,Jackcameoutfromthebathroom.Hefirstcutthelinesofthealarmsandmonitorswithtoolsfromhisnewsuitcase.Hewasalltoofamiliarwiththeequipmentsincehehadbeenworkingtherefor8yearsandhadbeenstudyingthesecuritysystemforthepast30days.Usingaspecialkeyandsomeothertools,hetheneasilyopenedthedoorsofthesafes.Thebank'ssecuritysystemwasn'tverygood,whichallowedJacktotakealotofmoney.Severalminuteslater,Jackleftthebankwithaheavybagfilledwithmoney.PlotHowdidJacksteal?Didhe4PlotHowdidJacksteal?Didhesucceed?Thenextday,hewenttoworkasusual.Everythingseemednormal:hejokedwithhisworkmatesandhelpedhisclientsashealwaysdid.Butnoonenoticedthat

hehadbroughtabiggersuitcasetowork,insteadofthesmallonehealwayscarried.At5:00pm,thebankclosed,andtheclerksandtheguardshadallgonehome.However,atthatmoment,Jackwasinthebathroom,andtheguardsdidn'tnoticehim,ofcourse.Whenthenoisescomingfromthestreetwerereplacedbysilenceandeverythingturneddark,Jackcameoutfromthebathroom.Hefirstcutthelinesofthealarmsandmonitorswithtoolsfromhisnewsuitcase.Hewasalltoofamiliarwiththeequipmentsincehehadbeenworkingtherefor8yearsandhadbeenstudyingthesecuritysystemforthepast30days.Usingaspecialkeyandsomeothertools,hetheneasilyopenedthedoorsofthesafes.Thebank'ssecuritysystemwasn'tverygood,whichallowedJacktotakealotofmoney.Severalminuteslater,Jackleftthebankwithaheavybagfilledwithmoney.Withfullpreparation,Jackmanagedtostealalotofmoneywithoutbeingnoticed.PlotHowdidJacksteal?Didhe5underlinedwordswife;money;operation;suffering;thebank;theft;suitcase;theclerks;theguards;thesecuritysystemsortoutcharacters:place:others:wifethebank;money;operation;sufferingtheclerks;theguards;thesecuritysystem;

theft;suitcase

underlinedwordswife;money;o6KeyinformationParagraph1:AfterJackhadbeengonefromthebankforawhile,thealarms(警報(bào)器)begantoring.WasJackcaughtimmediately?notverylikelyWhatwouldhappenafterthealarmsrang?Thetheftcausedgreatattentionfrompeople.WhatwouldJackdo?KeyinformationParagraph1:Was7Paragraph2:Butthemostunluckymanwasthemanagerofthebank,anoldman.Whywashethemostunluckyman?Asamanagerofthebank,whatwouldhappentohim?betoblame;beremovedfromthepositionHowdidJackfeel?ashamed;guiltyWhat'stheresult?Jack——tellthetruth;bepunishedLinda?Paragraph2:Whywashethemos8Jack:workasusual——feltguilty——tellthetruth——bepunishedmanager:betoblame——beremovedfrom/befiredLinda:besaved/dieJack:9存在問(wèn)題邏輯混亂，與上文不符腦洞亂開(kāi)--Para.2，無(wú)視首句話信息人物關(guān)系不明，節(jié)外生枝缺乏常識(shí)——無(wú)視法制個(gè)別關(guān)鍵詞理解不到位--alarm,manager,unlucky語(yǔ)言表達(dá)不清——幾句話說(shuō)不到重點(diǎn)；情節(jié)主線不清，

順序混亂；語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤影響整體表達(dá)存在問(wèn)題邏輯混亂，與上文不符10未明確說(shuō)明manager的不幸結(jié)果Jack心安理得逃脫法網(wǎng)，不符合價(jià)值觀未明確說(shuō)明manager的不幸結(jié)果11Jack按理已經(jīng)離開(kāi)一段時(shí)間了，與上文不符Jack按理已經(jīng)離開(kāi)一段時(shí)間了，與上文不符12讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)課件13

情節(jié)基本清楚，符合基本邏輯，語(yǔ)言雖有錯(cuò)誤，尚不影響整體表達(dá)。情節(jié)基本清楚，符合基本邏輯，語(yǔ)言雖有錯(cuò)誤，尚不影響整體表達(dá)14Paragraph1:AfterJackhadbeengonefromthebankforawhile,thealarmsbegantoring.Thepolicearrivedatthebankveryquickly,onlytofindnoonethere.Thenextdaywasareallyspecialdayforthetown,which

wasfilledwithnewspaperandTVreporterscoveringthestrangetheft.Theclerksatthebankwerebusydiscussingthecase,ofcourse,includingJack.Thepolicecouldonlypromisetocatchthethievesassoonaspossible,eventhoughnoclueshadbeenfoundyet.Paragraph1:15Paragraph2:Butthemostunluckymanwasthemanagerofthebank,anoldman.Heseemedtobetheonlypersontoblameandwasremovedfromhisposition.Atlast,withenoughmoneyforheroperation,Jack'swife