讀后續(xù)寫：兄弟情深講義-高三英語(yǔ)寫作專項(xiàng)

閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Iwasinmyroom,slowlygettingreadytoheadtothecommunitytheaterwiththerestofmyfamily.Iwasn'tinthemoodforbeingonstage.“Kate,comehere,”mymomcalledfromdownthehall.Ifoundmymomoutsidethebathroom,holdingawetbook.Henry,mynewstepbrother,wasnearby,workingonacomplicatedstringknot,asusual.Mymothergavethebookashake.“Henry'sbookisinthebathtub.Didyouputitthere?”“Notonpurpose,”Isaid.“Itwasalreadyontheedge,andithappenedtofallinwhenIsteppedoutofthetub.”Mymotherglaredatme,somethingsheneverdidbeforeIhadastepfamily.“Youcouldhavepickeditup,”shesaid."Thatwouldhavebeenthekindthingtodo.”AsHenrywalkedaheadofustothecar,mymomtookmeaside."Thisisourcorneroftheworldnow,Kate,"shesaid."Let'strytomakeitagoodone.”Thecommunitytheaterwasbusywhenwegotthere.TheaterusedtobewhatmymomandIdidtogether—oneplayayearforourspecialthing.WithHenryinvolved,itdidn'tseemsospecialanymore.Henry'sdad,whohadarrivedearliertohelpsetup,wasalreadyincostume.“Dearchildren,”hecalledinatheatricalvoice,“CometoFather.”Ithoughthewasaniceguyevenbeforeheandmymotherstarteddating.Unfortunately,Inowhadastepbrothertodealwith.Soon,itwascurtaintime.Ipeekedoutattheaudienceandnoticedthatthedarkenedtheatrewasfull.Myheartbeatfaster.IforgotmyannoyanceatHenryastheleadactresssang,“Thehillsarealivewiththesoundofmusic!”Nothingcomparedtoshownights.Beforelong,itwasmyturn.Iwentonstage,songbookinhand.AswekidslinedupbeforeHenry'sdad,whowasplayingthepartofourfather,IrealizedhowpoorlyI'dtiedthestringonmyskirtwhichwasoverleggings.Ishouldhaveaskedmymomforhelp.注意：1.

續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.

請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Andthen,suddenly,thestringknotonmyskirtcameuntied.______________________________________________________IshotHenryagratefulglance._____________________________________________________一、語(yǔ)篇分析本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者開始時(shí)不接受繼兄Henry，Henry喜歡做繩結(jié)，這天作者要在社區(qū)劇院上表演，結(jié)果發(fā)現(xiàn)自己裙子上的繩結(jié)開了，非常尷尬，還好Henry注意到了，幫作者把繩結(jié)系好了，過后也感謝了Henry。二、篇章雙線（情節(jié)線+情感線）不想上臺(tái)表演（不高興）→媽媽想讓我和繼兄和諧相處（生氣）→上臺(tái)表演前心跳加速（緊張）→上臺(tái)后發(fā)現(xiàn)沒系好裙帶（后悔）→在臺(tái)上裙帶脫落（尷尬）→繼兄Henry及時(shí)地幫作者系好裙帶（感激）三、學(xué)生出現(xiàn)的邏輯問題有的同學(xué)寫到Henry的爸爸幫助作者系好了裙帶，這與續(xù)寫第二段的提示句IshotHenryagratefulglance不符。第三段中的句子Henry,mynewstepbrother,wasnearby,workingonacomplicatedstringknot,asusual，暗示了Henry擅長(zhǎng)系裙帶，為續(xù)寫做了鋪墊，遺憾的是，很多學(xué)生無視文本存在，任意發(fā)揮，導(dǎo)致了跑題現(xiàn)象的發(fā)生。有的同學(xué)寫到Henry的媽媽幫助Henry系好了裙帶，這與續(xù)寫第二段的提示句IshotHenryagratefulglance不符;

第三段中的句子Henry,mynewstepbrother,wasnearby,workingonacomplicatedstringknot,asusual，暗示了Henry擅長(zhǎng)系裙帶，為續(xù)寫做了鋪墊遺;

最后一段最后一句Ishouldhaveaskedmymomforhelp，表面作者本想找媽媽幫助，卻沒尋求。估計(jì)很多同學(xué)不理解這句話的意思，把它曲解為我向媽媽尋求了幫助，導(dǎo)致了跑題現(xiàn)象的發(fā)生。四、表達(dá)不知所措、緊張、害怕、尷尬Myheartwaspoundinglikearabbit.我的心臟狂跳。Afloodofembarrassmentandfearwelledupinmyheart.

一陣尷尬和恐懼涌上了我的心頭。Atthatmoment,Iwasatalossabouthowtofacetheembarrassingsituation.就在那一刻，我不知道如何面對(duì)這種尷尬的局面。Iwasataloss,notknowingwhattodonext.我不知所措，不知道下一步該怎么辦。Uneasyandanxious,mypalmsweresweatingandmyheartwasbeatingquickly.我的不安和焦慮，手掌流汗，心跳得很快。Iwascompletelyseizedbyastrongsenseofshameandmypalmsweresweatinguncontrollably.我非常害羞，我的手掌無法控制地流汗。五、表達(dá)羞愧、感謝、感激、感恩Deeplytouchedbyhiskindness,Ifeltmybloodrushtoface.

我被他的善良深深感動(dòng)，感到我的臉變得很紅。ThinkingaboutwhatIhaddonetohim,regretandguiltoverwhelmedmelikeendlesstides.

一想到我對(duì)他所做的一切，遺憾和內(nèi)疚就像沒休止的潮水一樣向我襲來。WheneverIthoughtofHenry’swetbook,myfaceturnedred.

每當(dāng)我想到亨利濕了的書，我的臉都會(huì)變紅了。ButforHenry’shelp,Iwouldn’thavefinishedmyperformancesmoothly.

如果沒有亨利的幫助，我就不會(huì)順利地完成我的演出了。Theinstanttheperformancewasover,IrushedtoHenry,huggedhimtightlyandsaidthankstohim.

演出一結(jié)束，我就沖到亨利身邊，緊緊地?fù)肀е?，向他表示感謝。Aftertheperformance,IwalkedstraighttoHenryandgivehimabearhug,whisperingtohim,“Thankyou!”

演出結(jié)束后，我徑直走到亨利身邊，給了他一個(gè)大大的擁抱，低聲對(duì)他說：“謝謝你！ThenIgavehimabighugandtearsofgratitudewelledupinmyeyes.

然后我給了他一個(gè)大大的擁抱，感激的淚水在我眼里涌出。六、情感升華Althoughwearenotbloodrelatives,thetiebetweenusisevenstrongerthanthat.

雖然我們不是血親，但我們之間的關(guān)系甚至比那更緊密。Ihavelearntalessonfromtheexperiencethatastrongrelationshipstartswithtwopeoplewhoarereadytosacrificeanythingforeachother.

我這次經(jīng)歷中吸取了教訓(xùn)，一段牢固的關(guān)系始于兩個(gè)準(zhǔn)備為彼此犧牲的人。Maybeitwon’tbesobadtohaveanewpersoninmycorneroftheworldafterall.

也許在我的世界角落有一個(gè)新朋友也是非常好的。Itisthestringknotthatletsmeunderstandhowkindmystepbrothertomeandhow

stupidIamforwhatIdid.

正是繩結(jié)讓我明白了我繼兄對(duì)我有多好，我對(duì)我所做的有多愚蠢。

5.ItwasHenry’skindnessthatmademefeelthe

warmthfromourfamily.Iwilltreasureitwithallmy

heart.

正是亨利的善良讓我感受到了我們家庭的溫

暖。我會(huì)用心珍惜它的。七、范文賞析Andthen,suddenly,thestringknotonmyskirtcameuntied.

ExtremelyworriedthatI’dlosefaceinfrontofalltheaudience,Icouldfeelmyheartpounding.Withbothmyhandsholdingthesongbook,Iwasatalosswhattodo,whenHenry,whonoticedmyembarrassment,cametomyaid.Hefixedmycostume,tyingthestringwithafancyknot.Hemademeajokeaboutme“not”knowingknots.Atthis,theaudiencebrokeintolaughter,butitfeltOK.IshotHenryagratefulglance.

Hesmiledasifmymistakewasnobigdeal.Igotthroughtheres