10 讀后續(xù)寫歷險(xiǎn)型(故事構(gòu)造“三大套路”)

讀后續(xù)寫：歷型：典文森遇）...................................................................................................................1：險(xiǎn)細(xì)描..............................................................................................................................3①海上難.........................................................................................................................................3②洪水................................................................................................................................................5③地震................................................................................................................................................5④火災(zāi)................................................................................................................................................5⑤受傷................................................................................................................................................6⑥叢林生.........................................................................................................................................7：險(xiǎn)故構(gòu)“大路”........................................................................................................套一惡環(huán)要托....................................................................................................................套二轉(zhuǎn)思技好....................................................................................................................套三萬(wàn)升要記....................................................................................................................：活用.......................................................................................................................................例：洞險(xiǎn).................................................................................................................................10：考題現(xiàn)................................................................................................................................真1：爸與森遇【20186浙江卷..........................................................................真2：游途遇【2017年6月浙卷.................................................................................14Part1經(jīng)典例文（林遇險(xiǎn)）retiredsearchanddog.HemissedownerAlbecauseAlhadoutawithout’snephewStevetookBradyalongwhenheandhiswenthike.ButsuddenlySteveZachburningrealizedthatlightninghadsetonfire.Wind-blownflamehadfromtopofoneanother.Thesummerhadintotinderbox(helpingIthadmorewindand

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butdidncomeback.nochoicebuttoleaveHeartsick,SteveandwentslopecouldnblameBradyforpanickingandescaping.himselfwantedtorunthoughhedidn’thaveaclueway.Theyhadn’tfarwhentherewasfamiliarandcamerunning注意：1.所續(xù)寫的短文詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左；2.應(yīng)使用個(gè)上短文中標(biāo)有下線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；3.續(xù)寫部分分為二段，每段的開語(yǔ)已經(jīng)為你寫好；4續(xù)完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。Paragraph1：“Where’veyou”Stevecried.

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messagewasclear,Stevehesitated.coursehewhathisunclesaidaboutBradysavinghislife,butthathadbeenlongago.Washestillsharpenoughtothroughthis?Bradyagain,urgently,“0K,bigguy,”Stevedecided...Paragraph2Bradyledtheslopeandintothetrees.Severalthedogstoppedgethisescaperoute.Oftenhedirection.Howlongthey’dwalkedSteveidea.justheldontoBradyleashwithonehandandkeptputtingonefootinfrontoftheother.Hewasalmostnumbwhenheheardthewonderfulsoundofrushingwater.Theyelltheboysranunsteadilyforwarduntiltheyjumpedcool,runningwater.“Brady,youdid第1段“你去哪兒了？史蒂夫叫道，雷迪直接停在他面前，開始把他推回他們剛爬上去的斜坡。當(dāng)?shù)俜蛉匀粵](méi)有得到它，布雷迪抓住男孩的牛仔褲，并拉得更用力。息很清楚，但史蒂夫猶豫了。當(dāng)然記得他叔叔說(shuō)過(guò)布雷迪救他的命，但那是很久以前的事了。還能讓他們度過(guò)難關(guān)嗎？布迪又緊急地拉了一下，“，大個(gè)子蒂?zèng)Q.第2段布雷迪帶領(lǐng)他們回到斜坡上，進(jìn)入樹林。這大狗停了好幾次，以獲得他的逃跑路線。他常變方向。他走了多久史蒂夫不知。他是用一只手抓住布雷迪的皮帶續(xù)一只腳放在另一前面。聽到嘩嘩的水聲，他幾乎麻木了。河！子們大喊一聲，搖搖晃晃地向前跑，直到他們跳進(jìn)涼爽的流水里。“布雷迪，你做到了Part2歷險(xiǎn)類細(xì)節(jié)寫①海上遇難天氣*Theskyisdarkenedwithgloomyclouds.Lightingflashedacrosssky,followedbyclapofthunder.Minuteslater,therecamedownpour.*Thehowlingandsmackedrepeatedlyagainstface.海上*Theboiledthestorm.

*Theangrywavescrashedagainstthesideoftheboat,withsplashinghereandthere.船*Leanedsideways*Theshiprockingupanddowntherestlesssea.*Thecrashingfilledtheirboatwithwaterfasterthantheycouldit.救援人*Butthen,asIlookedindistance,Idiscoveredaofthreeorfourbigheadingtowardstheshore.*Withoutthinking,Irandowntheholdingbodyboardonthewayandshoutedatastrangertocallthepolice.*Pattingfacesup,Icontinuouslytoldthemtostrong.遇難者*Shetokeeptheofbreathingsothatcouldbreatheevenly.*Ifeltextremelyexhausted（-）*Lookingthevastsea,Ifeltasensefearsurgingthroughwholebody.*Saltstingingmyeyes,Icouldhardlylongcouldholdon.*ButIshoutedinmyhead:keepon.*Heanairplaneflyingoverhead.withnoflashlight,hewasinvisibleinthevastocean.*Hetookoffhisyellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldtoanopenareaandflaggedifcameback.*Insheerdesperation,Ifinallycaughtsightofsomeboatswithlifeguardsonheadingtowardsus.Thankyou,lord.*Quitesoon,feltstrongarmspullmeoftheseaontotheboard.(摘自杭二中參考答)救援過(guò)程*Thenhedraggedherupperfromthewater,.救人未遂

*Heheldherhandtightlyseparatedthem.*Hefoughtthewavesstrovecatchher,butfailed,shewasdrifted其他*Energyreturningmagically,herosetohisfeetandaction.*Theywavedtheflagandscreamedforhelp.*BearGryllscaughtsightofshabbyboatandmenrags.*Theytakenboardandthankedoveroveragain.*Fromthemon,hemadeuphismindnevertotakeanyrisksunlesshecouldensuretightsafety.Becausewassimplyhisstubbornconductsandhisignoranceof...that...②洪水*Thewaterrising.Twohourspassed.Hedidnottomoveaninchforfearofslipping.*Anothertwohourslater,henoticedthatwaterlevelwentenoughthathecouldanescape.*Stiffkeepinginonepositionforslowlyunfoldedhisbodies.*Cautiouslyandsteadily,hemadehiswayforwardtoentrance.③地震*Deepcracksopenedupinstreets.*Thecavedin.*Hugebuildingscollapsed,sendingcloudsofdustintothe*Theanimalsgrewrestlessasifinanticipationofdisaster.④火災(zāi)屋子*Fannedbywind,thewasbathedinanimmensestreamofflames.*Thehousewasbathedanstreamflames.

*Theroaringfireswallowedthewholehouse.煙*Densesmokeswirledandbillowedandherforamoment.*Thethicksmokecausedstumbleblindlyaround,burnedhiseyes,madeitimpossiblebreathe.人的反應(yīng)*Throughtheofficedoor,sheflamesclimbingupthewall.*Bothofthemwerecoughingandtheireyeswerestinging.*Sheclungher,terrifiedbytheleapingflames.*Turning,hefoughtthroughthesmokeandranoutofthehouse.*Shieldinghernoisefromshepromptedrunforsafety.openedthefrontdoortheirtoinvestigate,athickcloudofsmokegreetedhim.*Bythen,theirmouthschokedwithbothofthemtheengulfingeverything.⑤受傷*Sheturnedaround,onlyfindTimbeatentogroundinextremedanger.*Afraidanddesperate,sherushedtowardshim.*Withallherstrength,instantlyseatedhimontothe*Hepulledhertowardshimwithfullstrength.*Herbodywasshenotbreathing.*Hescoopedintohisarmsandstruggledtofeet.傷情*Heattackedviolentlycoveredwithscratches.*Therewasatrickleofbloodfromthewound.

治療*Sheappliesacleantowoundandpressfirmlyonittostopthebleeding.andstitchedthewound*Applysomemedicinetohiswound⑥叢林逃生意識(shí)到不見了*Hescannedaroundtheforher.“Eurus?heshoutedagain.*herheartdroppedasrealizedshegone.*hesparednoefforttofindher,itwasinvain.*Thinkingbacktoallofthegoodtimesthathehadsharedwithher,herealizedthathelovedherandhewantednothingforhertocomeback.逃生*Hetriedtogetonfaster,couldnotfindwayoutofthebush.*HegettingbecauseCeilwasheavytocarryforyoungboy.*Atlasthecameintoopenspacewithlargethemiddle.*Hequicklysoakedhisclothes,fortheapproachingsmokecouldthem.救援*Heimmediatelyranforsearching,runningafter*Mypoorchildren,theflamehaveburntthemtodeath.thoughtsbdesperately.*Whiletheyonwithouthope,therecamesweetvoice.”Dad!fromsb.*Sbjumpedwithjoyandhuggedhiskids.*Shecouldhearwatertrickingsomewhereatadistance.

Part3歷險(xiǎn)類故事造“三大套路套路一：劣環(huán)境要烘So,myandIputournewcowboy，gotonourhorsesslowlytowardsthe.（年11月江高考NeverhadIlovelycreatureinmysoIfolloweditswithoutthinking（年月浙江高考）processofseekingforItotallyimmersedincharmnature（年11月江高考）What'shefoodwithletphonesupplies.（蘇省如皋中學(xué)2021屆高三第一學(xué)期教學(xué)質(zhì)量調(diào)研試）Wewerenowhere,onlyunderwear,withoursuppliesourcellphones.（北省宜昌市第二中學(xué)2021屆三起點(diǎn)考試英語(yǔ)試題）套路二：折思維技巧例如，故事中我們迷路了，正在想辦法如何脫離困境。Suddenlyitoccurredtouswethetoguideitdarker,makingitincreasinglyusmakeout（突然我們想到我們可以堅(jiān)持小路引導(dǎo)我們回去。但天色越來(lái)越暗，使我們走道路越來(lái)越困難。）解：個(gè)子于正變負(fù)的式迷后想了法，于正”但外環(huán)不許天太。于負(fù)”【材累

1.Ultimately,weweresafesound安然無(wú)恙（1711浙江高考）2.Wejumpedintotheto（開車送我們?nèi)パ策壵荆?werewereabletocallour（湖北省宜昌市第二中學(xué)屆高三起點(diǎn)考試英語(yǔ)試題）套路三：能升華要牢需要牢記，歷險(xiǎn)類的文章不要無(wú)緣無(wú)故拔高主題，一般的主題詞是“勇敢難當(dāng)然還有一個(gè)萬(wàn)能的表達(dá)“這是一次難忘的經(jīng)歷萬(wàn)句：Thatdaywassounforgettablethatitwouldstayinmymemoryforever.那是此忘它永留我記。遇到危險(xiǎn)并且最終成功脫險(xiǎn)的經(jīng)歷必對(duì)我們每個(gè)人來(lái)說(shuō)一定是一生中難忘的經(jīng)歷以這個(gè)句子使用的場(chǎng)合還是挺多的。句子中使用了so...that的句式結(jié)構(gòu)：如此......以于。是一個(gè)形容詞，表示“無(wú)法忘記的”。萬(wàn)句：OnlythendidIrealizethatitwasbraverythatconquerwhateverdifficultyintheway.直那，才識(shí)，是敢能服切難遇到危險(xiǎn)后敢對(duì)能決問(wèn)題個(gè)句子突出勇敢這個(gè)核心“險(xiǎn)型”的故事里是常恰當(dāng)?shù)倪@話使用了倒裝的結(jié)構(gòu)和強(qiáng)調(diào)結(jié)構(gòu)結(jié)合的方式屬高分亮點(diǎn)句?！静睦?/p>

Sittingintheguestroom,Ifounditblissfultobeby（年月浙江高考）Despiteingoodwasreallyhewasbacktotheresorttoreunitehisfamily（江蘇省如皋中學(xué)屆高三第一學(xué)期教學(xué)質(zhì)量調(diào)研試）3.As發(fā)機(jī)慢運(yùn)轉(zhuǎn)時(shí)發(fā)出突突聲Itripnotbebadafterall.Good-bye,regularoldsummervacation.HelloTripofaLifetime（十校聯(lián)盟續(xù)寫講評(píng)）Part4靈活應(yīng)用例1：山洞險(xiǎn)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。monthsago,friendLisa,andI,plannedtosomethingadventurous,sowedecidedtoexplorecaveinoutskirtofcitywithsomefood,water,torchesandmostimportantlycellphones.Butnotgoingwell.Wecouldnotvehicledropusthere.Atlonglast,wefindtaxiwhichtookustheofthecity.AnotherevidenceofluckwasthatHarryhadhiscellphoneAfterwegotoutoftheoflocalsuswaytotheThelookedveryattractiveyetmysterious:thewassodark,andthetinysoundsmadetheinsectsandanimalscouldbeheardproperly,pullingusintothecaveunknownsupernaturalpower.Asweweremovingforwardmademarksontherocksalongourpathusoftheexitofthecave.Andalwayskeptourmobilesswitchonmodetocontacteachotherincasewegotseparatedandevenworse,lostinthecave.Aswewereforward,Harryfeltthatwasfollowingourfootstepsbuthehisintuitiontoajoke.Whenwereachedinthedeepofthecave,welostwayandgraduallythefogspreadeverywhereandnotabletoseeotherproperly.ofgotscaredofwhatwashappeningaroundus.Suddenly,wenoticedthatHarrywasnotwiththenwe

vaguelyheardashoutfromthedepthofthecaveandwethoughtwasHarry,westartedsearchingforhim.Butourtorchesleftusesuchthickfog.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左ParagraphSowegropedourwaytowardsthedirectionoftheshout._______________________________________________________________________________ParagraphAfterwereunitedwithHarry,wetofindthewayout._______________________________________________________________________________【答案】wegropedourwaytowardsthedirectionofshout.Frightenedaswere,westillmadeourtosearchforHarry.Hardlycanseeanythingincompletelydarksituation,sowehadtofeelourwaysearchHarrywithallstrength.andcautiouslymovingforward,weheldourtightlyinordernottobeseparated.Withvoiceapproaching,realizedwouldmeetHarryimmediately.Fortunately,whenfindingHarrysittingonground,sighedwithaAfterwereunitedwithHarry,wetofindthewayout.Withouthesitation,wedecidedtohuntforwhichhadmadebefore.“Igetit!Harryscreamed.Lookingquickly,wefoundtheseclearmarkseasily.Itwastheofthesemarksthatquicklyfoundexit.walkingoutofthecave,weknewweweresaved.Fromthisexperience,whatlearntwasthatwasdangerousexploreunknownwordwithoutafullydetailedplan.【解析】【分析】本文是一篇記敘文述了作者和小伙伴們一起去探索一個(gè)位于城市郊區(qū)的山洞洞面太黑又有霧，所以Harry和們走散了。當(dāng)聽到Harry的呼救后，我們一起找到了Harry，最終逃離了山洞。【詳解】段續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“所以我們摸索著朝著呼喊的方向走去可第一段可描寫我們是如何在山洞中尋找Harry的②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我們和重后，我們?cè)噲D找到出路?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫我們利用之前所做的記號(hào)逃離山洞的過(guò)程。

2.續(xù)寫線索到音——尋找Harry—找到Harry——尋找出口——逃山洞——領(lǐng)悟感受3.詞激活行為類①尋找：huntfor/searchfor/find②大叫：③接近：approach/drawnear情感類①小心：careful②害怕：scared/frightened【點(diǎn)睛】高分句型Frightenedwemadeourtosearchfor(運(yùn)用了as引讓步狀從句時(shí)的倒裝結(jié))[高分句型Withouthesitation,wedecidedtohuntforthesewhichmade用了引的限制性定語(yǔ)從)[高分句型3].wasthehelpofthesemarksthatwequicklyfound(用了強(qiáng)結(jié)構(gòu)Part5高考真題再真題1：爸爸與我森遇險(xiǎn)【年6月浙江卷】閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。Itandmywantedtotreatmeavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtakeonatotheWildWest.WetookplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinlateafternoon.UnclePaul,dad’sfriend,pickedusfromtheairportanddrovetohisinPecos.HiswifeusadeliciousdinnerandwetoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwater

rollingdowntherivernearby.earlyinmorning.UnclePaulwoketohavebreakfast.“Thedaystartsdawnonfarm,hesaid.Afterbreakfast,tohelpAuntTinafeedthechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze(吃)IwasimpressedtodadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.Intheafternoon,askedUnclePaulifIcouldtakehorseride,andsaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithwasngoingtakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonhorses,slowlytowardsthemountains.belateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andtotracksothatyou’tgetlost!“OK!dadcriedback.AfterawhilePaulhisfarmhousewereofwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetheafternoonmixedtocreateascene.Itlookedlikebeautifulwoven(編的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustus.注意：1.所寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左；2.至使用5個(gè)文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；3.續(xù)部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好；4.續(xù)完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。Paragraph1Suddenlyalittlejumpedinmyhorse.Paragraph2ideawherewegot_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Possible

Paragraph1:Suddenlyaoutfrontmyhorse.Dadfounditcutethatwedecidedchaseit.Afterawhile,wecompletelylosttheTherewasnothingleftinoursightbutthetrees.notbeabletoitbacktothefarmhouseintimeforsupper.”Ithoughtmyself.Afteraseriesoffruitlessattemptsfindwayout,felthungryandtired.Paragraph2:Weideawewereitwasgettingdark.Wegotstuckinforest.Andunexpectedshoweraddedtodifficultyofusfindingahome,forallthetrackswehadmadedisappearedbecauseofrain.Ialmostonofbreakingdownwhenmyfathersaid,“Donson.Ithereisrivernearthehouse.Findthewillhome.Finally,foundtheriverandtohousealongit.Needlesstosay,weateadinner.真題2：旅游途中遇【2017年浙江卷】第二節(jié)讀后續(xù)寫（滿分25分閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。Onabright,Julyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.OneofhisfriendsstoppedabicyclebuttheyencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldupwithhimAsMacpedaled(騎行alongalone,thoughtfondlyofhiswifeyoungdaughtershome.toshowthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that’sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtoside,instantlyitwasnatbutawolf,quicklycatchingwithhim.’sheartjumped.Hefoundhiscanofbearspray.onthefiredthespraytheAbrightcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andMacrelief,fellback,shakinghead.aminutelater,itwashisagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac

bike,tearingopenhistentbag.Heatthewolfasecondtime,again,itfellonlytoquicklyrestartchase追趕)pedalinghardwavedandyelledpassingcarsbutwascarefultoslowd